Interesting intro... now let's see where you take it.

Note: You may want to refine the fight scene a bit. Considering how badly
outclassed Akane was by Juan, her suddenly simply grabbing the scythe out
of his hands seems quite doubtful.

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 / Here lies:\  First Corollary of Taber's Second Law:
|   Andrew    |    Machines that piss people off get murdered.
|             | 
|   I think   |       
| he's hungry | Honk Louder! I don't have a firing solution yet!
|             | 

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