From: DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net>
I must be on a roll. Two C+C's in the same night:
"The Man in the Mirror"
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Then she began to resent you for letting your dreams wither and die.
And so you grew angrier. You began to hate her for not being able to
give you the normal life you wanted: to have children and to watch
them grow.
In a bitter twist of fate, his kids probably would have grown up just like
Jinnai. ^_^
I'd pay to see it.
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Author's Notes: Um. . . I'm not really sure what to say about this
except that I'm sorry to all the Makoto fans out there; I didn't
really mean for him to come out as such a big bastard.
Nah. It's a very realistic possibility that it could come to this. Of
course, I hold a more optimistic view, but there's nothing wrong with
seeing a sadder resolution to their relationship. Love doesn't necessarily
conquer all, and stories like this remind us of that fact.
Makoto's emotions are dealt with realistically and the reasoning behind
his
resentment is sound. The narrative flowed well, though overall the story
felt a little short, though I'm not certain what you could have added to
it. Overall, a very nice piece.
Thanks. I personally thought that it was a bit too short as well, but I
couldn't think of anything more to add to it <shrug>
Thanks for the wonderful c&c. I really appreciate it ^_^
D.B. Sommer
Emily Siazon
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A little reminder as you go through today:
When someone annoys you, it takes 42 muscles to frown, but it only takes
4 muscles to extend your arm and smack them in the head.