Phil wrote:

Some quick commentary while I'm suffering from insomnia. :)

As always, C&C remain my opinions and suggestions only. Feel free to
ignore anything I say.

     Positioned in front of the cat, she studied the dead animal.
She was not too partial to cats however Yoriko loved them because
it reminded her of Iczer-2: fiercely independent, and headstrong.

suggest:

She was not too partial to cats. However, Yoriko loved them because
it reminded her of Iczer-2: fiercely independent, and headstrong.

This should be "they," not "it."
 

Actually, why are they dissecting cats anyway? Most unis offer frogs

to the students. :)

     "It is.  It's probably because of this yellow liquid inside
of it.  Strange, last time I checked, most life usually has blood
within them...."

suggest: most living creatures usually have blood flowing within

them...

I suggest "most mammals had blood"
 
-- David

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