Just a little bit of madness I came up with on the Dragonsworn
 Wheel of Time Discussion Board... thought some of the fellow
 Jordanites on the list would like this.  ^_^

First of all:  I'm not sure if this kinda fic belongs on-list. But that's 
outside my ken, so........

Secondly: You need to clean it up. I mean REALLY clean it up. There are times 
when it really isn't clear who's talking, and you wobble between going script 
or going prose. This needs to be fixed. Fixed fixed fiixed. Bad flow, bad bad 
BAD flow.

Thirdly: Well, if this is just a one-shot spammy thing, it's fine. But if you 
plan to archive it somewhere, you should be aware that you've based a LOT of 
it on things that are assumed, rather than KNOWN, about the WoT, and if even 
one of those things is worng, it'll wreck the story and make you look like a 
bloody fool. I agree with you on most of them (all except for Moridin being 
Ishamael) but if it turns out that Taim ISN'T Demandred or something, well, 
there goes the plot down the drain. 

Oh, and when Rand's mom pops up, it should be Tigraine, not Kari. Makes it 
cooler. And you spelled Kari wrong anyhow.

Anyhow, funny little fic. I enjoyed it. It's not anywhere near the caliber 
of, oh, say, "The Color of Trust", but it's nice.

-Mercutio
"A plague 'a both your houses!"