As the subject said, I'm looking for pre-readers to
comment on 2 fics I'm writing, which I'm hoping to
release by the end of October. Both are very rough
drafts and Alternate Universe type stories.

The two fics I need help on are:

Akana: Chapter 00-01
A Ranma 1/2 Alternate Universe fic. Currently in a
rough outline form. 

And

Ki - Chapter 01
A Ranma / Key: The Metal Idol fusion fic. Mixed prose
and script.

Private replies please. Oh yeah, as to not make this
total spam, I've included a short intro of a fic I've
set aside to do in the near future when time permits.

Sincerely,
-Kahlil N.

The Anything goes Ranma 1/2 Fanfic page:
http://www.geocities.com/tokyo/temple/9371


A Ranma 1/2 Alternate Universe fanfiction
* All rights belong to whoever owns them


A part from thee (Really rough, brief intro)
by Kahlil Noriega


Somewhere, the pained cries of dogs echoed through the
night. Through littered streets veiled in a light coat
of mist; shifting at the slightest touch of a cold
breeze, while moonlight played among the shadows...

The night seemed to be alive then, with voices
stirring the air; dull and rumbling, chanting that
slowly grew louder as time passed. The air grew colder
as dogs wimpered in fear, cowering back to their holes
as the mist seemed to thicken then...

Thicken around a certain Tendo Dojo...

In the shadows of a crackling fire he sat in darkness,
in his grizzled old hands he held a chain of worn and
cracked beeds, praying as he held it before him.
Shaking as a trickle of sweat slide down his forehead
to splatter on the dull cracked-spheres of wood as his
chanting steadily grew louder, and his lips moving
even faster...

The fire crackled as it roared...

Through the halls of the Tendo Dojo, through the door
of Ranma's room; Ranma stirred on his bed, sweat
covered his forehead as he tossed and turned in his
sleep. Gritting his teeth as he turned to lie back on
his side and curl up into a ball, legs drawn close as
his face held a troubled frown. A small gasp escaped
his lips...

The voices in his head screamed as it reached its
climax then stopped...

And as quickly as the pain came, so it too it went.
Silence veiled Ranma's room as it's only occupant
slowly shifted farther in his sleep, his posture
mirroring his feelings as he lay there on his bed,
relaxed as night patiently waited to greet the coming
dawn...

***

The fire continued to burn, shadowing the man that
stood before it as the final verses of his chant
echoed through the rooms walls, before fading into
nothingness with the clatter of wooden beads...

~ End intro...


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