All comments strictly my own opinion; your mileage may vary.

This chapter is grossly over-using the "She's a lesbian?" joke. This can
be quite funny up to a certain point, but this chapter really beat it
into the ground.

Yeah. I kinda think I overdid it, myself. <shrug>

Also, while mis-assumed sexual innuendo does have the potential to be
funny, it needs to be kept believable for it to work. People hearing the
word "come" will almost always assume the innocuous meaning. If you want
Yuka to assume the other one, you need to establish beforehand something
like (1) Yuka is secretly obsessed with sex, or (2) Yuka is already
convinced that Aizen and Ranko are sex-crazed perverts (her believing
that they're lesbians is nowhere near enough).

Establishing WOULD be a good idea. The truth behin this one, is that she's
sex-crazed. I won't take it any farther than that.

Just my 2 yen here, but Divinity's been a genuinely funny series so far.
It really doesn't need to resort to these kinds of cheap laughs to the
degree that this chapter did.

Ahh... Apologies are in order then. I apologize to all who I've offended in
the making of this chapter. I've already gotten several emails basically
saying that they won't read Divinity anymore because of my level of crude
sex jokes. While I won't take back the chapter, I will modify it a bit to
be more understandable for RAAC release. This chapter seems to stand out
from all the others, because with this one, it's either you loved it, or
you hated it.

Since I'm the author, I'm not qualified to make that judgment. Still, to
all who I've offended, I apologize.

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