Jefferson Natividad wrote:

Shampoo spat her contempt at the notion of being
outnumbered. "Bah, Pervert Girl run away if she want. Airen
fight, so Shampoo fight with him." She narrowed her eyes in
consideration and quickly calculated the odds. "Is fifty-
three. Leave main demoness to Ranma. Shampoo take fifteen."
She glanced at the other martial artists in the group of
six. "That leave fifteen for Lost Boy, ten for Crazy Rose
Girl, ten for Spatula Girl and three for Pervert Girl. That
seem fair."

   Just what I expected from our favorite bouncy amzon.

But, of course. :)

Weakness? wondered Ranma. His eyes widened in sudden
understanding as he felt a blow slam into his legs. The
world tilted crazily as his feet slid out from under him.
Completely focused upon his arms during his special attack,
he couldn't prevent himself from falling flat on his back.
His breath exploded from his lungs at the brutal impact.

  Hmm, I've never thought of that weakness of the Chestnut Fist.  Very Good.

I noticed it during the movies. (They were good for something after all :)

On an intrinsic level, it was virtually impossible for her
to accept that demons actually existed in modern-day Tokyo,
and that Ranma had been fathered by a Cat-Demon and birthed
by a human woman. Surely that kind of stuff only happened
in anime? Irrationally, she knew it was more than possible
what with all the insane things that kept happening to
Ranma, but her rational side insisted on throwing as doubt

  I think it should be "throwing as much doubt"

Noted. Thanks.

Nabiki watched as her father seized upon the tiny morsel
of reassurance as a starving dog would seize a day-old
piece of rotten meat, and silently shook her head. "I think
I'll go to my room and watch some videos. Call me if
something happens, Sis."

  What kind of videos? Could it be the Hentai kind?

What do you think? :)

Shampoo smirked. "Great-grandmother give learning tapes
for demon combat. Maybe test them on Ranma, see if he
like." Her smile widened as she took in Akane's purpling
face. "So, Mercenary Girl keep this type of tapes," she
mused, casually dodging a charging bull-ogre. "Is good to
know."

  Why, she's gonna rent some for more, ahhh Demon Fighting Techniques?

Borrow free of charge is more likely. :)

Ranma stared back dispassionately. The world was uniformly
gray, harsh and hideous. He could feel the need to rend,
to tear, and to destroy welling up from the inky darkness
that his soul had become. Ranma bared his teeth in cold joy
as Shukumaru leapt away defensively. His mind flickered
randomly and a thought struck him.

  Looks like Ranma has gone neko again, only this time he's conscious.
Yehey!!

This isn't the nekoken, not quite.

Was this how Shukumaru saw the world?

As a mere plaything to be used and destroyed in pure
selfishness?

All of creation stood before his power. He only had to
reach out and seize it, to claim it for his own. Shukumaru
would be first. He would seize her, use her, discard her,
then kill her. Then he would take all of his fiancees as
concubines, making Akane his first... His train of thought

  Make Akane her first whar?

Concubine, fiancee victim, sex slave? Take a pick. :)

This time, they fought as equals. Even though Ranma had
rejected the deadly hunger that sought to possess his soul
and had enabled him to move faster than the wind to avoid
Shukumaru's poison claw, he found himself able to match her
speed. His arms, legs, hands, feet and his body flashed
instinctively to counter Shukumaru's maneuvers in a
graceful dance. A killing dance.

  Hmm looks like that brief tasste of power boosted Ranma.

This will get cleared up in a later chapter.

Shukumaru turned to face Ranma. She quivered in fury. "And
you! You saved my life?!" Her voice was choked with hatred
and disbelief.

"Wasn't my idea," Ranma drawled. "If I'd thought about it
first..."

    He'd still do it.  He's Ranma after all.

Yup, but he wouldn't admit it.

"Why that witch!" Ukyo exclaimed. "How could she?!"

"That's quite correct," Kodachi agreed empathically. She
turned to Ranma. "How could she call Akane Tendo your woman
when it is completely obvious that I have that role!" She
paused dramatically, before adding, "Not to disparage your
mother's loss, of course, Ranma-sama."

   Man you just gotta admire the Kuno's Psychotic view of which is more
important.

She is a Kuno after all. :)

   Well, It was excellent.  Hmm, I wonder if there will be some Lemonn
scenes in the following chapters.  Now that Ranma's darkside is revealed can
he control it and use hi sfull power which is connected to it at the same
time?  Well, I think I'll just wait see.

Heh. Well, no Lemon scenes - I don't like writing them. Besides, walkingthe Lime
edge is a lot more fun.

  Keep up the good work.

I will. Thanks for the comments.

Phil.

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