Lucres Annuiteas wrote:
--- Donny Cheng <chengdo@home.com> wrote:
To think Kakaroto's son, Gohan, born of peasant
think,
stock could be more of
a Saiyajin than his own son. It still jarred Vejita
Hmmmm...Gohan was born of Chichi and Kakaroto, so he's
as Saiyajin as Trunks. Trunks is just younger.
They may have the same mix of blood such as with Goten, but Gohan is
still different. As in when he fought Cell and reached SSJ2 the power
and anger took ahold of him. While both Goten and Trunks became angry
for a minute before the novelty of changing made them normal again.
Goku also exhibits this uncontrollable anger when he fought against
Freeza. That's the difference between the Gohan and the other part
Saiyajin children.
even worse compared
to Trunks.
Vejita and Goku are the only pure Sayaijns.
And Goten, Trunks, and Gohan are half. But to Vejita, at least in this
story, the personality also matters. Trunks along with Goten don't
exhibit any Saiyajin traits such as violence, battle appetite, etc.
said. He caught himself glancing to the door of the
kitchen, looking if
anyone might have been listening in on them. He
shook his head and
wondered if his fellow Saiyajin were laughing at him
from hell.
Well, at least we're sure where they went...=)
Hard for them not to. The entire race killed or took part in it. Even
Vejita as shown will be going there when he dies :P
"Hey, no fair, they're even bigger than mine!" Bra
exclaimed as she
reached out and touched one of Ranma's breasts.
It seems like every girl Ranma meets up with isn't as
developed. Is this really needed?
Actually, Bra as I noted earlier is developed while Pan was not. She's
just drawing attention to them.
Pan glared at Bra as the girl started to
demonstrate by jutting out her
chest. Pan nearly exploded when Bra took a hold of
Ranma's hands to let
him 'compare'. "I think Ranma can tell."
Add a little more emotion, maybe ',she snarled.' to
emphasize Pan's mood here. Also, I don't think Bra
would be _that_ forward, especially with her brother
there watching.
Litterally no personality for her is given in the manga. I think of her
as a slightly spoiled girl that is somewhat of a tomboy given having
Vejita for a father and quite open like Bulma was back in the old days.
Full version of the one hour Ignorance is Bliss fic.
Full version? I hope it doesn't turn about to be a
lemon or a developed lime. The genius of it was that
it _wasn't_ finished and left a lot implied. Any
continuing of it would only be gratifying to those
wanting to see Kasumi and Ranma 'get it on'.
Of course, just developing the middle and other parts
and not continuing would be a nice improvement. It's
just the continuing that I think would cheapen the
story.
I probably won't ever write lime or if I do it'll be other some other
name ^_^ I'll keep both versions on my page for comparison when I'm
done, but there were quite a few things I wanted to write but couldn't
get done in time.
Well, this was a nice chapter. Not really that much
happened, but I enjoyed it anyway. Can't wait for the next...
Thanks for the indepth C&C, most of which I agreed with except for some
stylistic suggestions.
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L.A.
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