In a message dated 9/30/99 3:12:21 AM Eastern Daylight Time, 
stiffani@super.net.ph writes:

<< >                    Kidnapped!
 >     Akane slowly woke up and tried to stretch, a futile effort
 considering
 
 
 >was evidant. The pigtailed martial artist turned kiddnapper smile
 >sheepishly, "Yeah...uh...Sorry about this!"
 >------
 >
 >    This one came to me in momment of inspiration and I just wanted C&C
 on
 >the idea.
 >
 
 
 Forgive me for being so blunt, but........ WHAT THE HELL???   ^_^
 
 You'd have to convince me Ranma has a good reason first.  but it's a
 nice, new, different perspective. >>
    Well, remember, this *is* being given as an idea, so it isn't completely 
here.  (The story, I mean.)
    I think that, as this seems to be told from Akane's standpoint, 
motivation for *Ranma* to kidnap her is not necessary -- if the author keeps 
to Akane's standpoint, that is.  Of course, I should hope that Ranma does at 
least try to tell Akane why he's doing this at some point.
    As it stands, it's a pretty good start, and I think that the only change 
I'd make at this point is that I'd have Akane telling the story instead of 
having it told from her point of view.  I would then, also, have her telling 
the story from some point in time after the end of the events in the story, 
so she can fill in things she didn't get to see but was told about 
afterwards.  (So she can fill us in on what she doesn't get to see firsthand.)


        --Ryo Hoshi