Yo! I usually don't give C&C, but when I see a really good action fic,
I can't help but comment!^-^

ShortYes@aol.com wrote:

    "Ladies and Gentlemen, thank you all for coming.  Quarterfinals will
begin shortly.  If you would all look up at the screens overhead, you will
notice the participants.  Please give them a round of applause."

Chiba Mamoru versus Ryouga Hibiki

	HA HAAA!

Tatewaki Kunou versus Tenoh Haruka

 
	Hmm...

Ranma Saotome versus Makoto Kino

	Gee, I wonder!

Eric Stryker versus Amy Anderson

	Oro?

Tatewaki Kunou versus Tenoh Haruka

* * * * *

    Kunou swung his bokken a few times, warming up.  *How the Kami must grace
this tournament since I, the Blue Thunder, have entered,* he thought to
himself.***

	Why is he here?  You might want to try *has entered*.

    Stepping up onto the mat, Haruka smiled.  *So he's into kendou is he
now?* she thought.***

	*So he's into kendo now, is he?*

    "I think you might be needing this?" someone spoke behind her.

    Turning around, surprised, Haruka found a smiling Setsuna holding a
bokken in her right hand.

    "Uh. . . thanks," Haruka finally manage to reply.  *How did she know I
might need one?*  "Setsuna, can you tell me why we were suppose to come
here?" she asked.

    "It's a surprise," Setsuna answered.  *A surprise to me as well,* she
thought to herself.  Still wondering why her future self had forbidden her to
look at what's to come.****

	Because that would be cheating^_^.

    Looking at his blond opponent, Kunou raised his bokken and pointed it at
Haruka.  "Know this lowly peasant that I, Tatewaki Kunou, the rising star of

	Not sure, but try "Know this, lowly peasant, that I...."

Furinkan High School, shall smite thee, lowliest of peasants, and then

	AAARGH!! Too many lowly peasants! Or try... *smite thee, the lowliest 
of peasants,...* 

    Looking over to Michiru, "Mama?  Why is papa holding back?"

    Smiling to Hotaru, "It would be unfair if Haruka-papa used some of her
Senshi abilities on a normal person.

	Don't worry, it's only Kuno!

    In the crowd, many stared at the match between Haruka and Kunou.

    "Luna, do you feel any negative energy from Haruka's opponent," Rei asked.

    Luna answered by shaking her head.

    "Could he be like another Tuxedo Kamen?" Usagi asked.

    Michiru was about to ask Luna if she was sure when she heard someone's
comment.

    "Wow!  Someone else actually managed to avoid Kunou's special."

    "Turning to the person who had spoken, "Excuse me, but could you tell me
more about this Tatewaki Kunou?" she asked.

    "Until last year, I never heard of anyone ever besting Tatewaki Kunou in
a fight," he replied.

    "He's that good?" Michiru muttered.  *Hmmm.  Interesting.*  "You said he
was undefeated until last year?  Who bested him in battle?" Michiru asked,
curious.

    "Saotome Ranma," he answered.****

	I was wondering about that. Above that, you wrote Tatewaki Kuno. Which 
order are you arranging the names?

    "Saotome-san doesn't seem to be that good," she commented, remembering
the previous matches that he had fought and barely won.

    "As far as I know, he's undefeated.  Never lost a fight.  Some say he
could be the best martial artist of his generation," the young man answered.

    "So you are saying he's holding back?"

	Of course!

    "Yes.  I saw him fight once.  I was traveling through Nerima and I saw
Saotome-san fight Hibiki-san.  Let's say that the construction business will
never fall into the red with those two around.  Now if you excuse me, I would
like to concentrate on the match.  The boy with blond hair is quite powerful
and skilled."

    "Thank you."  Turning her attention back to the ring, *You have no idea,*
Michiru thought, after hearing the later part of his statement.  As the fight

	Try latter.

    In the ring, Haruka had finally been able to land a series of punch and
kicks on her opponent yet for some reason, he still got up.  *Man, this guy
can take a punishment,* Haruka thought.  Even though she was not transformed,
being a Senshi gave Haruka a few perks.  One was faster healing and the
others were more power and speed, though not up to par with her transformed
state.  Still, it amazed her that this boy still stood after being repeatedly
pummeled into the ground.

    Getting up from his last beating, "You think you can defeat the great
Tatewaki Kunou, you are sorely mistaken.  No man shall ever defeat me!!" he
shouted.***

	Umm, doesn't Ranma count?

    Having finally had enough, Haruka, charged.  Instead of going for the
head, she aimed much lower.  Dipping the tip of the bokken down, Haruka
sliced upwards when she was within range.  Seeing Kunou's eyes cross, Haruka
smirked.  "So you weren't wearing a cup, huh?" Haruka asked the slowly
crumpling kendouist.

	...EEEVIL.

    "What sort of man are you to strike so low.  Not even the vile sorcerer
Saotome would stoop to using such a tactic," Kunou managed to groan.

    "This is anything goes and if you haven't noticed I am a female," Haruka
stated, turning around and walking off.

    "Such power," Kunou muttered, as his vision blacked.  Just as he fell
unconscious, a vision of Onna-Ranma, Akane, and Haruka popped into his mind,
all cuddling close to him.

	S&M must really be catching on these days...

* * * * *

    Next up was Ranma versus Makoto.

    Seeing that he was about to face one of Ami's friends, Ranma smiled.
Bowing to his opponent, he got into a loosely ready stance.  Ranma was taking
Makoto more seriously than any of the other opponents had had faced in this
tournament.  He had fallen into a stance he had created himself that
emphasizes speed and precision.  It was the first step in his attempt in
creating a new branch of Anything Goes.***

	Speed and precision, huh? I think I'll mention this later...

    Inside the ring, Makoto was tired and sweating.  For the past half-hour,
she had constantly been on the offense or if she tried to rest, the defense.
Staring at Ranma, she was jealous that he had yet to break a sweat.  *I'll
get you if it's the last thing I do!* she swore.***

	Ah! So is he trying to bring out her hidden power?

    As the match approached the hour mark, Makoto fell to her knees, panting.

	Still, I can't see the match being allowed to go on that long. You may
want to shorten it up.

    "Give up?" Ranma asked.

    "It's . . 'cough' . . not over yet . ."  weezed Makoto.

    "Yes it is," Ranma said and clocked Makoto with his right fist.

	You also may want to add 'reluctantly'. I know he's pretty angst-ridden, 
but I doubt he would just hit a girl like that.

* * * * *

Amy Anderson versus Eric Stryker

* * * * *

    "Really?  I thought that you talked your opponents into submission," Ami
asked, using the same pitch most secretaries used to greet clients, the
higher than normal voice.  Ami smile grew a little as she saw Eric face get
beet red.  Normal Ami wouldn't taunt the person she was going to fight but
had to see if it worked for her as well as it worked for Ranma-sensei.
*Ranma-sensei's tactics work.  I just hope I haven't bitten off more than I
can chew,*  she thought to herself****

	*herself.

    The referee lowered his hand, signaling the fight to begin.  As Ami had
predicted, Eric came charging at her like a mad bull.  'If a guy is bigger
than you, then he is usually stronger but slower,' Ami recalled Ranma's
advice.  Eric was fast but Ami was faster.  This was evident when Eric's fist
connected with air.  Having thrown caution to the wind, Eric overextended
when he missed Ami.  This left Ami with a great opportunity to bring her knee
straight into Eric's midsection.  As he was doubled over and slowly backing
away, she quickly delivered a roundhouse kick to his temple, sending him
crashing to the mat.

	Ami learns well!

* * * * *

Chiba Mamoru versus Hibiki Ryouga

* * * * *

    Ryouga shrugged and stepped on to the mat.

    Mamoru sized up his opponent. After making a couple of decisions on how
to approach this fight, he decided on an answer as to how to deal with this
opponent.

	Run away? Fall to the ground and play dead?

    As the referee lowered his hand and cried, "FIGHT!" Mamoru quickly sprang
into action. He sped across the mat, and delivered a flying kick to Ryouga.
He followed it up with a couple of quick jabs, and a solid right cross that
would have left most people sprawling on the canvas.

    Unfortunately, that list did NOT include Ryouga Hibiki.

	No s#!t. 0.0

    After absorbing the punishment from Mamoru's blows, Ryouga began his
assault which consisted of two simple moves.  A punch to Mamoru's midsection,
which forced the breath out of him and a head-butt that, dropped him to the
mat.

	HA!

    Ryouga looked own at his fallen opponent.  Perhaps he had hit him too
hard? Ryouga shook his head, *This guy was supposed to be a martial artist.
He should have been able to take the hit.* Ryouga thought to himself.  It
never occurred to him that not all fighters had the endurance training that
the Nerima gang had.  Ryouga with the boulders, Ranma with the mallet, Kunou
with the constant pounding from his two beloved and so forth.  Ryouga walked
off the mat as the referee declared him the winner still not having noticed

	*winner, still...

Ranma or Kunou at the tournament.***

	Now Kuno, I can understand, but why is Ryoga there?

* * * * *

    Seeing her Mamo-chan fall unconscious from a single blow angered Usagi.

	Two blows.

Ranma versus Amy

* * * * *

    Ami smiled as she saw Ranma approach the mat.

    Seeing his opponent, Ranma felt that she looked familiar.  Heaven knows,
there were enough people with a grudge against him.  *It was all Oyaji's
fault too,* Ranma thought.

	Well, not exactly...

    Winking at Ranma, Ami bowed to the referee and then to Ranma.

    He was confused.  Why did the girl wink at him?  Did she want a date or
something?

    Already knowing the outcome to this fight.  Ami started to take off her
belt she had gotten and handed it to the referee.  Bowing to Ranma once
again, she left the mat.

    Lifting the belt into the air, "Amy Anderson has forfeited!" the referee
shouted.****

	You'd think he'd figure it out, considering the name and the style she 
used.


	Onward to B!

* * * * *

Finals

* * * * *

    Bowing to his opponent, Ranma once again felt that same hidden power
within the blond boy he was facing.  As he was studying his opponent
carefully, a nagging feeling somewhere in the back of his mind told him that
something was very familiar with this Tenoh Haruka.  He reminded Ranma of
Ukyou for some reason.***

	Gee, I wonder why?

    Seeing the bokken connecting with her son, Nodoka winced.  She knew how
painful a blow like that could be, considering she was a master of the blade.


    "Come on Ranma, you can do it!" she cheered her son on.****

	So, does Nodoka have any idea what Ranma is capable of?

    At the same time, Usagi and the rest of the Senshi that were watching the
final bout, transformed, getting ready to battle evil.

	I don't think you need a comma after bout.

    *Why?  Why is this all happening to me.  First the curse, then the
multiple engagements, Akane's death and now this.  When will I have a normal
life.  That monster is going to pay for hurting my mother.  He is going to
pay dearly.* Ranma thought darkly.  Somewhere along the line, he started to
exhibit a faint blue outline.

	hee.

    "So much energy," the Daimon said from the hole in the wall after doing a
brief scan of the populace.

    "Stop where you are!" a voice cried out from among the chaos.

    "I am Sailor Moon!"

    "Mars!"

    "Neptune!"

    "Venus!"

    "Saturn!"

    "We are the Beautiful Warriors, Sailor Senshi, and in the name of the
Moon we will punish you!" Sailor Moon declared.

	Yep, S&M is definitely catching.

    "Hahaha!!!  No one can st . . ." Akuma started to shout when the ground
in front of him exploded from an energy blast.  "What?"

    Everyone turned to the source of the blast to see Ranma glowing bright
blue.

	hee hee.

    "You bastard!  I'm going to tear you apart!" Ranma shouted, his attention
having finally returned to the present.  The ground around Ranma exploded.
The updraft from Ranma's aura caused his clothes to ripple in every direction
while his hair drifted upward.

	...I'll save this one for later, too.

    Ranma's sudden rise in power did not go unnoticed.

    "Oh my gosh!" Sailor Moon exclaimed.

    "How?" Mars asked in awe at the display.

    Uranus just stared at Ranma.  There was something different about the
young man this time that she had not detected throughout the tournament. *Was
this why Setsuna wanted me here?* she thought.

	No mention of him being the glowing warrior?

    "Do you think you can do better than these little girls?" Akuma asked,
and sneered.

    "Die!" was Ranma's single reply to the taunt.  Cupping his hands in front
of him, concentrating, a ball of energy started to form.

    "No!" Uranus screamed.

    Ignoring her warning, Ranma launched his chi sphere at Akuma, "Moko
Takabisha!"

    Impacting Akuma in the chest, he started to laugh.  "Hahaha! Thank you
for another technique."

    "That was just a warning," Ranma said as he leaped at Akuma, leg
outstretched.

    Shaking his head at how naive the boy was, Akuma sidestepped the jump
kick. Smirking, Akuma lashed out at Ranma with a roundhouse but was surprised
to see Ranma dodge it while still in midair.  *This might take a bit more
effort,* Akuma thought, not wanting to waste one of the attacks he had
collected, saving it for the Senshi.

    That split second was all Ranma needed to plant his foot into Akuma's
face.  Using it was leverage, Ranma pushed off and executed a round house,
that contacted with Ranma's right heel rocking Akuma backwards, off of his
feet.  "Have to do better than that, ba...ka!" Ranma taunted.  His facial
features were now that of the cocky martial artist he knew everyone hated but
inside he was grieving.  He had just lost his mother and now his innocence.
He was going into a fight, with the intent to kill.

    Getting to his feet, an enraged Akuma shouted, "You dare taunt the mighty
Aku..."  A punch to his midsection cut his speech short, leaving Akuma
breathless.

	Maybe I missed it earlier, but what does Akuma look like? I mean, when
someone says Akuma, I think Street Fighter.

    Following the punch, Ranma unleashed two more followed by an open palm
thrust upwards, that forced Akuma's head back.  Taking advantage of his
stunned opponent, Ranma threw an elbow strike that ended with Ranma
delivering a leaping reverse side kick that pushed Akuma back some more.

    "Hurt don't it."

    "Die, insect!  Venus Love and Beauty Shock!" Akuma shouted out in rage,
releasing one of the attacks he had saved.

    "Too slow," Ranma spoke and connected again with another punch.

    In a fit of rage, Akuma threw a punch directly at Ranma's smirking face.

    Easily side stepping the punch, Ranma caught the outstretched hand and
bent it back against the natural flow of the arm.

    "Arggg!  Moko Takabisha!" Akuma unleashed the attack with his other hand,
forcing Ranma to release it before he did any permanent damage.

    "Nice but nothing beats the original."

	Good line.^_^

    "Why won't you just fall down and die!" Akuma's face was twisted with
fury.

    Ranma suddenly turned serious, "For what you did to my mother, I'll kill
you."

    On the sidelines, almost all but forgotten by Akuma, Usagi, Rei and
Haruka stared in awe at the display of skill and power emanating from Ranma.

	They should be in awe, considering that monster just handed them their 
a$$.

    Rei shook a little in fear.  She knew before hand that Ranma held some
power but never imagine just how much.  Looking at Ranma, she felt a
tremendous amount of negative energy and that scared her.

	....Later.

    Usagi just stared at Ranma, opened mouth.

    Haruka was the only one that saw the goldish glint that had appeared in
Ranma's gray blue eyes.  "Masaka!" she swore, having finally realized what
the difference was.  *There's death in his eyes.*

	Now. I like the Kenshin/Battousai-like angle, with just enough DBZ for 
effect. Instead of transforming into a green-eyed, blond-haired saiya-jin, he
turns into a golden-eyed, red-haired assassin. Nice.

    Akuma was beyond furious, for the past 15 minutes, he could not for the
life of him hit the human and what's more, he had used up all but one of his
remaining attacks.

    In the meantime, Ranma started to circle the Daimon.  *I'm going to kill
you now,* he swore.

    "Stand still!" Akuma shouted in frustration. He felt uneasy.  Something
was wrong.

    "You just signed your death wish," Ranma spoke, his voice devoid of
feelings, totally concentrating on becoming one with the soul of ice within
him.

    "What?"

    Haruka was the first to notice that something was terribly wrong.  For
the past few moments, Ranma had ceased any form of offense as he continuously
dodged Akuma's attacks.  The aura that had emanating from Ranma moments
before had vanished.  *Where did all of that power go?* Haruka thought when
she suddenly felt a strong gust forming.  In an enclosed building that
shouldn't have any gust of wind at all.  What made Haruka take notice even
more was the gust of wind was coming from the two combatants and not the hole
in the wall.  *He's going to do something big!*  she panicked.  Rushing over
to Saturn, Uranus hoped for a miracle.

    Slowing completing the circle, Ranma gave little notice to those around
him.  All his thoughts were on the man in front of him, the one that had
killed his mother.  That final thought made concentrating on the Soul of Ice
harder but it also pushed any thoughts of guilt out of his mind.  This
man/monster was going to die.  "Hiryu Shoten . . ." Ranma shouted, clenching
his fist, preparing to thrust it in the air.  As he finished the move though,
Ranma punched Akuma instead, releasing the full fury of the move into a
single point on his opponent's body.  "Ha!!!"

    "Silence Wall Enclose!" another voice called out at the same time.

    Within the dome, Ranma's final move created a vacuum, sucking all of
Akuma's energy into Ranma's fist.

    Feeling all his energy leave him, Akuma slumped forward. The only thing
holding him up was the fist embedded into his gut.

    For a few seconds, this lasted, until the full fury of the Hiryu Shoten
Ha was released.  Akuma's body could not handle the stress of the sudden loss
of energy.  So when the winds started to lash out at him, it blew him apart,
vaporized by the shear amount of energy being released.  The power behind one
of Ranma's most powerful moves had no where to go afterwards, having been
trapped within a protective dome and so expanded, engulfing Ranma in the
process.  In a bright flash of light, Saturn cried out as the Silence wall
exploded.  All the excess energy burst upwards, destroying the roof of the
gymnasium.  Rain poured through the hole and pooled around an unconscious
female Ranma.  The only sign of life was the slow rising and falling of her
chest.

	...Hmm. Ya think the soap wore off?^_^

	Like I said, the action was nice, and the story seems to be picking
up. I do wonder, however, if you are going to have an obsessed daimon
destroying
Ranma, or a back from the brink daimon destroying Ranma (I think an Ohgi
lesson
may be in order). @o@x-oro?

To be continued:

	Looking forward to it.