errrr. telling people that you are not likely to
continue the fanfic is NOT the way to get pre-readers.
or even readers. I for one did not read past that
part. I don't want to start a story that's not going
to be finished.  And please, do not start off with
'its probaly[sic] bad'. that also does nothing to
encourage readers. 

Actually I skimmed a bit of the story. it looks a
little rough but, IMO, you have potential as a writer.

Suggestion:try again after you get some C&C (or even
if you don't) FINISH a story. At least have a finished
outline so you know the direction the story is taking.
Then, post with OUT the negitive comments. Let the
story speak for itself. 
I really would like to read this story . . .but I've
been left hanging with too many stories. :(

(and I'm still getting mail about my own "Sukeban
Senshi"...Chapter 7 is coming. I promise. ^_^) 


--- Ken Brockwell <rolothamasi@HOTMAIL.COM> wrote:

Hi, this is basically my first fic and all I want is
some C&C so that I can 
improve my writing skills. I already know its
probaly bad. That's why I want 
the C&C.

If any of you want to pre-read my stuff, please mail
me. I'll send you fics 
with the tag [pre-read] for you to judge so I wont
clog up the ffml. Lastly, 
I'm not likely to continue this fic. Mabye one or
two more installments of 
the most for those of you who might enjoy it.

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