In a message dated 9/21/99 11:43:38 AM Mountain Daylight Time, 
rolothamasi@HOTMAIL.COM writes:

Hi, this is basically my first fic and all I want is some C&C so that I can 
 improve my writing skills. I already know its probaly bad. That's why I 

want 

 the C&C.
 
 If any of you want to pre-read my stuff, please mail me. I'll send you 

fics 

 with the tag [pre-read] for you to judge so I wont clog up the ffml. 

Lastly, 

 I'm not likely to continue this fic. Mabye one or two more installments of 
 the most for those of you who might enjoy it.
 
 Disclaimer: The characters and situations belong to their respective 

owners. 

 Please note that at the time of writing, no original characters were 
 intended to be used. Meaning that previously unknown characters may have 
 originated either from an obscure source or that the names may have been 
 changed.
 
 [  ]  Denotes Panda signs
 < > Denotes Mandarin
 
 Ranma spat out the blood in his mouth as he got himself to his feet. This 
 'Daigo' character was a lot tougher than he had thought. After the first 
 fight, Ranma figured he had the big guy pegged, but boy, was he wrong. 
 Rushing at his opponent, Ranma was greeted by a flurry of punches that 

ended 

 with a vicious straight that sent him sailing. Game, set, match: Daigo.
 
 Cologne shook her head as she looked between the prone form of her 
 son-in-law and the departing figure of the one who so easily defeated him. 
 "Ranma, what am I going to do with you?" she thought to herself as she 
 hefted him onto her shoulder. It's not that he couldn't have met up to 

this 

 new challenger, it was his own laxity that resulted in his defeat. This 
 Daigo had a solid defense, yes. An aspect of the Art that seemed largely 
 ignored by the martial artists here in Nerima. He excelled in all physical 
 aspects but was not exceptional in anything in particular. Not like Ryouga 
 with his strength or Ranma with his speed. "No son-in-law, you were bested 
 in a test of skills."
 
 *******
 
 Ranma gained consciousness to the gentle ministrations of Dr. Tofu. "How'd 
 I'd get into these things. Why'd every martial artist in town gotta take 
 something offa my hide?" As he thought about it, he knew how he got 

himself 

 into this particular altercation.
 
 It started about three weeks ago. A couple of thugs were picking on some 
 kid. He went in and shoved them off, which got this guy dressed all in 

black 

 and wearing a motorcycle helmet to pick a fight with him. He had to admit, 
 the guy had potential, but beating him wasn't too tough. About a week 

later, 

 the guy showed up with his 'big brother', who took Ranma out pretty easily 
 with a firewall technique. For the rematch, Ranma figured he would goad 

the 

 guy into using it again and then hit him with the Hiryu Shoten Ha, but 
 things didn't go that way. The firewall Daigo used this time was much 

weaker 

 than the previous one and the Hiryu Shoten Ha couldn't take him out. After 
 that, the beating started.
 
 *******
 
 Cologne did something that could send shivers down a demon's spine and 

make 

 the most virile of men to go impotent. She smiled. Rereading the parchment 
 once again, she set out and wrote a reply. "What a stroke of luck! This is 
 just what son-in-law needs."
 
 <Great-grandmother, why are you smiling? Have you thought of a new way for 
 husband and I to come together? > Shampoo asked as her curiosity got the 
 better of her when she saw her elder smiling.
 
 <Why yes Xian Pu, but that is not the only reason I'm smiling. > she 
 answered disturbingly cheerfully. <And do I need a reason to smile 
 great-granddaughter? Go practice your forms till its time for bed. There 
 will be no supper for you tonight. >
 
 <Yes, great-grandmother. > Shampoo replied. "Wow, she MUST be in good mood 
 to give out such light punishment." She thought as she went to carry out 

her 

 punishment.

Umm.... I'm not entirely sure, but I think this may qualify as character 
bashing.  I can't see Cologne punishing Shampoo for no reason at all.  And I 
can't see her regularly giving Shampoo "punshiment" in the first place.  You 
need to give some situation that would explain why Cologne would be punishing 
her here, or stop with what might be seen as a stereotype.

 
 "What a nice little girl." Cologne said to herself before continuing her 
 work.
 
 *******
 
 Two weeks later
 "Excuse me, is this the Tendo residence? I was told I could find Ranma 
 Saotome here. My name is Retsu Toriyama."
 
 "Why yes, it is. But Ranma's at school right now. He should be back 

anytime 

 though. Would you like to come in for some tea, Mr. Toriyama? I'm Kasumi 
 Tendo."
 
 "Why thank you young lady. Yes, I would enjoy a spot of tea right about 
 now." the short bald-headed man said in reply. "And please, call me Retsu."
 
 To be continued later
 

As has already been stated.... give some completion here.  If you plan on 
continuing with the story, continue with it.  There is no reason to let 
people know in advance that you might or might not continue.  It's pretty 
unlikely that you will get readers even to start reading that way.  Another 
thing here is to let people decide for themselves.  You shouldn't put your 
story down in the first place.  If you make blanket statements in the 
beginning, you affect what kind of C&C you are going to recieve in the first 
place.