"We have visual confirmation of the target. Target is currently
in earth orbit over the Pacific ocean." Said Hyuga as an image of the
Angel appeared on the main viewing screen. This Angel looked like a
giant bird, glowing in space. Many people would of consider it very
beautiful, if they didn't know it's true purpose.

{"We have visual confirmation.  Target is currently in Earth orbit 
over the Pacific Ocean," said Hyuga".  "Many people would have 
considered it"}

{You need to go through and give question marks to all your questions.
Do not capitalise things like "she said" or "he asked".  They are part
of the sentence}

       "Unit 03 has increased speed. It's headed strait for unit 02."

{"straight"}

        Nabiki look at the form before her. It was something out of
a horror picture. A giant white humanoid crucified on a large cross.

{Sentence fragment}

Maya. "It's uses the unit's AT field as a propulsion system, much like
a rocket pack. It's base on the flight systems used by past Angels."

{"It uses..."  "It's based..."  Incidentally, an AT field doesn't strike
me as being particularly like a rocket pack.}

        "Expand you field and concentrate on flying. Like if you were
Superman."

{"your"}

        Nabiki looked as the hatchways over Central Dogma. Expanding

{As the hatchways what?}

a circle of battered soldiers, his pigtail on end. *Shit! Not only is he
in the Cat Fist, but now he was pissed.* Nabiki then noticed a very

{Tense confusion}

       "REOWWW!" Ranma lept as the dart ricochet off the street.

{"ricocheted"}

     Ritsuko almost winced. "Angel is just a code name we give
to the alien invaders. They're not actually from god!"

{"God" is a proper name and so should be capitalised.}