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From: Jack Staik <jstaik1043@earthlink.net>
To: ffml@fanfic.com <ffml@fanfic.com>
Date: 17 September 1999 11:45 (GMT)
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma][fanfic]The Third Wish
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Ranma 1/2: The Third Wish
By Jack Staik, Bookkeeper-At-Arms
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"Ranma?" Akane asked. "Is something the matter?"
"Um, no, Akane. Not really. Everything is perfect." He sighed.
<But it's not right.> he thought to himself.
o/~ It's not right but it's okay... o/~
BTW, (right,> he thought to himself.)
The day was perfect for a picnic lunch and cherry-blossom viewing. Ranma
and his mother had gone out on a picnic,and had 'accidentally' run into
the Tendos (Akane and Ranma were good friends, but they - and everyone
else - knew it was just a matter of time).
As usual, Kasumi Tendo's fiance, Ono Tofu, was there. Nabiki Tendo had
even gotten leave from the police academy to go on holiday with her
family.
~Okay, this has me worried....
"Hey! Ranchan!"
Ranma looked up, and saw his oldest friend Ukyo with her fiance Tatewaki
Kuno coming toward them. Kuno's sister Kodachi and her boyfriend Royga
Hibiki were right behind them.
~Now... now I'm just plain scared. :)
Typo: Ryoga not Royga
The picnic passed without incident, save for Ranma getting quieter and
quieter. Tatewaki cracked up the families with one of his classic funny
stories, Kodachi kept trying out new recipies on Ryoga (who didn't mind
in the least), and Nodoka and Soun kept exchanging whispers and knowing
glances.
~Stuh-stuh-stop the pain! <puppy-dog eyes> Pleeeasse!
;)
(trying out new recipes on Ryoga)
Then Ranma stood up. "THAT'S IT! THIS IS TOO WEIRD!"
~And about time, too. :)
Everyone was amazed. "Ranma, is something wrong?" Akane asked, her voice
filled with concern.
"Everything is wrong." he stated flatly, and pulled out an ornate ring
~is wrong," he stated
of vaguely foreign design and a pendant. Placing both on himself,he held
~himself, he
"OKAY!! OKAY!! Geez, my sinuses..." said the squeaky voice from the
potato salad.
~Li'l stylistic nit-pick. You only really need one exclamation mark
for each "OKAY". It's pretty obvious from the capital letters and
the one exclamation mark that the Servant is shouting loudly.
"EEEEEEK!!!" the Servant said. "I - I mean ... er, uh ..."
~See above.
"You heard me!!" Ranma yelled. "Undo my wish!! Make everything normal!"
~You really like your exclamation marks, don't you? <grin>
The little creature froze in mid-air. "Oh kark." it said disgustedly.
~kark," it said
"Lemme handle this one, kid." the servant said.
~kid," the servant
And is it "the servant" or "the Servant"?
"And, of course, I'm constrained by the Invocation to perform three
tasks for this idiot." the Spirit continued.
~idiot,"
The Spirit smirked."Wish One was the typical 'Do the first thing the
~smirked. "Wish
sucker says' wish. He was being pursued, he wanted to be somewhere safe,
so I teleported him to a desert island."
"Pursued?" Akane said in alrm. "By who?"
~said in alarm
"Um ... that's not important right now." Ranma said.
now," Ranma said.
The Spirit continued, "Then this whiner starts unloading onto *me* about
all of his problems!'Oh boo-hoo, my life is shit' - that sort of thing."
~problems!' Oh
"I told the little bastard all the stuff that had bothered me, then I
wished for it all to be gone!" Ranma explained. "The past week has been
everything I ever wanted."
Akane smiled.
"And it's all WRONG!!"
Akane stopped smiling.
Heh. This bit I like.
"Um - um, lotsa things." Ranma said nervously.
lotsa things," Ranma said
The spirit floated up to Ranma and kicked him in the temple. "Look,
twit." it began. "I am a *MINOR* Spirit. I can't do major stuff -
~twit," it began, "I am
~and is it "spirit" or "Spirit"? You've used both.
"Sorry about this." Ranma said.
this," Ranma said
"In another world." The Spirit said. "A world where Genma Saotome did
*not* die sealing up Happosai in a cavern."
~world," the Spirit
"So that's why you've seemed odd lately." Tofu said. "You're a different
~lately,"
Akane looked diffident. "R-ranma ... are we so terrible? I mean - *our*
Ranma waned to get away from us -you want to get away -"
~waned? Do you mean wanted?
Ranma shook his head. "No! It's not that! You're a great person!
Everyone here is a lot nicer!" he slumped. "But it's not home."
~You can't 'slump' speech. Capitalise 'he'.
"None taken." said the Spirit.
~taken," said
The Spirit felt a sinking snesation. By the terms of his Binding, if he
~a sinking sensation
"And what about everyone else? These folks are *much* nicer than the
Nerima Wrecking Crew!"
"Who?" someone asked.
Ranma waved a had dismissively. "That's just what the neighbors called
us."
~Heh. Appropriate enough. ^_^
(Ranma waved a hand dismissively. "That's)
"Just look!" it said, swooping down between Ryoga and Tatewaki. "You
guys are Ranma's friends?"
"Yeah."
"Of course."
~Need an extra line between "Yeah." and "Of course."
...unless it's on purpose.
"Nope." Ranma confirmed. "But I do kinda miss the cries of 'Die
~"Nope," Ranma confirmed.
"Who's the 'Pig-Tailed Girl'?" Kuno asked.
~Never thought I'd see _that_ sentence. :)
people. And for the record, she only had *one* alligtor."
~Well, that makes it perfectly all right, then. :p
BTW, "alligator"
The Spirit danced around. "The best part! No Genma here! He died years
ago!"
"That is a good point." Ranma agreed.
~good point," Ranma
Since when has Ranma ever truly wanted to see his father dead?
He seemed quite concerned for the old guy when Ukyo beat
up Genma at the beginning of that first Ukyo arc.
"He was a liar, a cheat, a glutton, and he'd steal anything not nailed
down or on fire!" the Spirit argued.
"That's not true." Ranma protested.
"Thank you, Ranma." Nodoka said, relieved.
"I've seen him steal things that were on fire." Ranma clarified.
Nodoka just gaped.
~Heh. Cute.
BTW,
true," Ranma protested
Ranma," Nodoka said
on fire," Ranma
"This one is just as nice!" the Spirit said. "A bit rough around the
edges, but servicable."
"HA!" Akane protested. "I haven't been serviced in a week!"
Everyone facefaulted. Ranma looked confused. "Huh?"
~LOL!
"Never mind." Akane said testily - which made Ranma smile.
~Never mind," Akane said
The Spirit started to glow. "I'm getting a message!" he said. From the
other Ranma! He's wishing to return!"
~he said. "From
"Probably the Chinese Amazons chasing him." the Spirit said with a
laugh.
~him," the Spirit
"Nice folks - just don't beat one in a fight." Ranma explained.
~in a fight," Ranma
"Yeah." Ranma agreed. "They never tell you about all the pummelling you
~"Yeah," Ranma agreed
"Good." he said, then kissed her.
~"Good," he said
-FIN-
Well, that was an entertaining little ride that was fun to read.
Reminds me a slight bit of a fic I read ages and ages ago,
where the Ranma from a boring world swapped universe
with the canon Ranma... or was it Akane that did the
swapping? *scritch-scratch* I can no recall.
Anyhow, everything in this is in my amateur opinion only. If I've
made any mistakes, then let me know. After all, the FFML's
partly about becoming a better writer, right?
~Kayu-chan
"You never really understand a person until you consider
things from his point of view... until you climb into his skin
and walk around in it."
~Harper Lee, To Kill A Mockingbird