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From: James Chu <chubacca@clam.rutgers.edu>
To: ffml@fanfic.com <ffml@fanfic.com>
Date: 05 September 1999 
Subject: [FFML] [OMG]Tommorrow is Yesterday

This is a fragment of a fic I started to write...  

More is coming soon

James Chu

<snip!>

He had finally managed to find some time alone with his 

love.  He had given a fistful of francs to Skuld and artfully 
steered hertoward the nearest 
~her toward~

ice-cream stand.  It didn't hurt to not that the apothecary 

and the lingerie shop near the stand seemed 
~to note that~

Unfortunately, whenever she turned her head and smiled 

at him with that smileof hers, he lost all his senses and 
often ended up giving a big goofy smile right back.  
~smile of~
~Heh. Sounds just like Keiichi.~

perfectly.  The old woman seemed to looksomewhat 
astonished at whatever Belldandy had said -- 
~look somewhat~

Keiichi vowed to learn _some_ French during the remainder 
of the trip -- and thrust her gnarled hands inside her apron 
pockets.  She drew an old brass key and thrust it into the 
lock, with a shaking hand. 
~You've used 'thrust' twice while they're close together. 
Try something different to avoid repetitiveness e.g. pushed, 
shoved, stuck, stabbed, jabbed.~  

<snip>

to be continued...  

~I certainly hope so. It was an intriguing beginning and I'd 
love to see its follow-up. The first scene was definitely my 
favourite out of the two, especially the way it ended. The 
formatting is a bit wonky, though.~

All IMO only,
~Kayu-chan