Since you took the time to write, it would be rude of me not to address your concerns!  ^-^

All I can say is: MORE!

  I'm working on it.  Don't worry, the well is a long way from dry on this particular story... by the by have you read any of the previous three? 6^-^

Please.  I'm already intrigued by Gojira and Atsuko.  
Jiro seemed a little trite, no offense, but he seemed to >be a Kuno who had his cornflakes peed in.  I know that >he practices Kempo, which I immediately associated with
Kendo for some unknown reason.  Perhaps instead of Kempo >you could make it Judo, which is a bit more "scholastic" >if you know what I mean.

  I'm aware of the Jiro-Kuno connection...  It occured to me often when I was writing the character, but I hope to diverge from this mold soon.  To be true, I was aiming more for the 'stereotype jock-jerk' that breed in just about EVERY school.  The Kempo club gives credence to his fighting abilities, which will become important in future installments... 

I would say other than that, great start.

  Actually, as I said, this is the third installment in this series.  The other two were posted a while ago, under the names: [orig][Teaser], and [orig][untitled]...
  If you'd like to see this (if you haven't already), e-mail me privately, and I'll send you a copy post-haste.
  This goes to anyone else who'd like to see how this story started... 6^-^

Good job,

  domo arigato! ^-^  

This is sounding interesting.  I'm looking forward to >the rest.  Just remember to spell check every once in >awhile.  Just a few sparse mistakes, nothing more.  

  I wish I could spell check, but the mailer I use doesn't have one... -_-  I TRY to edit before I send it off, but as always, a few things get missed.

Good job otherwise.  I'll be looking!  ^_^
(niko)

  Arigato!  ^-^


  -Sukyandaru

  "Sometimes I'm strange, and callow."
    -Willow, BtVS

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