Very good. This is much, much better than your previous two attempts.

Here, you have vastly improved grammar and sentence structure, not to
mention spelling. You also have a story which not only makes sense, but is
well thought out, organized, and fits the standard Pokemon formula nicely.

Still a bit rough in spots, as noted below, but all in all, well done.

One stormy twilight, Ash, Misty, Brock, and Pikachu were heading

towards Victory Road. Ash had

just won his Earthbadge, and wanted to challenge the Elite Four

straight away. However due to Ash

Ash's

*great* direction skills the group was lost.

Heh, typical.

"No wander Pikachu is running around like crazy." Brock said."He was

wonder

      "It is going to be a tough battle for the poor Pikachu to

win."comented Brock. "Good luck my

friend. If you need something from me, I'll be hidding behind those

bushes."

Dramatically speaking, yeah, it makes sense for this to be a tough battle.
Moltres *is* a Legendary Bird, after all...even if this *is* the only
Pikachu in existence who could barbecue Rock-type Pokemon with an Electric
attack...

"What?" said Brock. "I can't bare to see Pikachu lose...again."

bear; 'bare' means 'naked' or 'to expose'. 'bear', aside from referring to
the animal, is used in the above context.

      Meanwhile Moltres prepared his Fire-spin attack. "Mol tres!" it

shouted as the mystical bird

unleashed a huge flame of fire at our heroes. Misty took a pokeball

'flame of fire' is a redundant phrase. Try 'gout of flame', or 'stream of
fire'.

      "Starmie, go!"Misty shouted, while she tried to protect herself

from the heat."Water gun!

Extinguished the fire!" A ray of water squirted out of the star-like

'extinguish' is the correct tense in this instance. Also, don't forget to
put spaces *around* quotation marks. You don't need them within the marks,
but in the above example, there should spaces where indicated:

"Starmie, go!" Misty shouted

from the heat. "Water gun!

       "Pikachu, Thunder!"Ash commanded. Sparks came out of Pikachu�s

cheeks, as he prepared his

Don't need this comma.

attack. Moltres, angered by the battle, flapped it�s powerful wings as

he prepared a Sky Attack.

Pikachu in the meantime, released his electric attack, only to find out

that he missed. Moltres used

Sky Attack on Pikachu, hurting him really badly.

Ehhh... 'really badly' doesn't work well in narrative prose. It's fairly
poor usage. Try this:

Moltres used Sky Attack on Pikachu, wounding him seriously.

Brock asked Ash: "What did you say before the battle?"

Don't use a colon like this in prose. Use a comma.

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What kind of Pokemon are you?
How do you do the things you do?
Share with me your secrets deep inside...
What kind of Pokemon are you?
Are you loyal through and through?
And do you have a heart that's true?
What kind of Pokemon are you?

The Eternal Lost Lurker
(The Pokemon under the skirt of the girl...)
lurkerdrome@megami.net

"Pokemon, getto daze!"