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Okay.
First off, it's a very good next installment of a rather good fic.  

It starts out very well, and is a pleasure to read... but it does have it's
problems. No fic is perfect.

Daisuke seems quite over-intelligent.  It was like listening to a
psychoanalyst preach to a restaraunt full of advice columnists.  In the
same scene, it occurs to me that Ukyou is more sensitive to Ranma's
feelings than she's ever been.  She never seemed to have the usual
fiancee-fantasies or overconfidence that you'd expect.  Now, this may be
intentional, this may not.  <shrug>

Genma.  I didn't recognize this Genma.  I thought the Genma from Quantum
Destines had put in a cameo.  Sensitive, determined to make amends, and
caring about the welfare of his son.  I just can't get my mind around it.
I suspect that an explanation or Genma-centric section is forthcoming.  If
so, great, disregard this part.  If not, there should be.

Nabiki. <grin>  *This* I loved.  I can really see Nabs getting this annoyed
at Nodoka under the circumstances.  Nicely played, at least in my eyes.  

Soun?  Perfectly done.  Fits right in.

The only truly major drawback I could see with this part of Ep5 is the same
one that plagued the previous four: Hyperpunctuation and needless
overcapitalization.  Its really distracting to the eyes to push thrugh a
half-dozen ?!?!?'s.  Trimming down on these would be a significant plus.

All told, this section was very good despite its faults, and I'm looking
forward to reading future parts.

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