hehehe
Actually, I was thinking the scene would've gone like so:

Ryouga stared again at the brightness.  It was as if he was stuck in that 
damn blizzard again, without the cold.  Then, just when his eyes were 
begining to become accustomed to the intensity of light, the damn thing 
shone like half a dozen Perfect Shi-Shi-Houkudans.  Ironic though, that this 
energy produced a soothing effect on him rather than the lonelyness of his 
high-powered technique.  He felt as if the world of pain, solitude, hurt, 
fear, and all other bad things has been lifted off his broad shoulders.  
Suddenly, he hears a voice.
"Come Home, Ryouga."
It was neither female nor male, but as if a chorus was beconing him, in a 
perfect, synchronized voice.
"W-Who.. Who said that?"
"Do not be frightened, Ryouga.  We will not hurt you.  Come.  Head toward 
the light.  The Light! Turn around, Baka!"

Hehe! I loved how you did yours though.  Skuld needs all the "brownie 
points" she could get.

From: "Derick Browne" <meachy@my-deja.com>
A while back Trakal wrote a fic where Ryouga's infamous anti-directional 
skills did him in, when he got lost in a blizzard.

I remember that one! Almost made me do a Shishi Houkudan myself! ::sniff::

I'm not big on the morbid stuff, however, I found this story very easy add 
on to.  In my case, changing it into a comedy.

How does the term go? A Tragic Comedy.. something like that O_~

"Ryougo Habiki...  Your time has come, I will guide you to your finally 
destination," said the voice.

Great.. you know You're in deep Doo-doo when even Heaven Botches up your 
name!

Ryouga slowly moved his arm and looked at the person that was coming out of 
the light.  He still could not make it out, but it appeared to be a lady.  
She had her hand out stretched and was gently floating forward.  Ryouga's 
heart began to beat faster as her face had cleared enough of the light to 
be seen.

"Ryouga come with....  Whoops!" yelled the lady as she toppled forward.

::tries to refrain from saying the phrase "And the Angels fell from the 
Heavens:: O_~

Ryouga ran up and caught her.  "Hey are you okay?" he said as he noticed 
that she was a lot shorter than he thought.  In fact, he noticed that her 
feet were not touching the ground as he held her up.  With a little 
uncertainty, he looked upwarded at her face and noticed that she was a kid.

Upwarded?  Perhaps 'Up toward' or 'upon her face' or even 'at her 
face/features/ect..'

Ryouga> I heard in Heaven you have eternal youth, but this is ridiculous!

"Who are you?"

"Sorry, I'm Skuld.  I usually don't do this, but I'm filling in for my 
sister Belldandy.  She's out having a great time with that jerk boyfriend 
of her's.  Unfortunately, I think I've ruined the dramatic affect. At least 
I can take these stupid hieght extenders off."

"Hieght extenders...  Wait a sec!  What's going on.  I just saw myself on 
the ground and everyone is actting like they can't here me."

Height (I know I know.. 'I before E' and all that crap.. but strangely, it 
does not apply here.)
Height Extenders?  ..... What's going on?...."
Question marks are your friends.  They will not bite you or throw you in the 
basement. :)
acting
Hear

Ryouga put the little girl down on her feet and turned around.  Skuld 
snapped her fingers and Belldandy's dress disappeared off oh her; allowing 
her tradmark overalls to show.  She walked up behind Ryouga and tapped him 
on the shoulder.  When Ryouga turned around and saw a huge mallet about to 
hit him in the face.  He was barely able to move out of its way.

off of her
this paragraph is kinda messed up.  Commas are also your friends! (You have 
alot of friends in the punctuation world! hehe) And why does Ryouga turn 
around in the begining of the paragraph?
Try this:

Ryouga put the little girl down.  Skuld looks at him expectantly, putting 
her hands on her hips.
"What?" He asked.
"Turn around, pervert! Let me change."
Ryouga shrugged, and mumbled to himself. "It's not like there's anything to 
see... URK!"
Skuld puts away her trusty mallot, mumbling profanities under her breath.  
Looking back to see that the Hentai wasn't looking, she snapped her fingers 
and her Belldandy-like dress disappeared off of her; allowing her tradmark 
overalls to show.  She walked up behind Ryouga, who was just regaining 
consiousness and tapped him on the shoulder.  When Ryouga turned, he saw 
another huge mallet about to hit him in the face.  He was barely able to 
move out of its way.

"HEY!!!  What are you trying to do?!  Kill me!!!"

Question marks! Remember the Question Marks!

"Don't be stupid...  You're already dead DUMMY!  Look, I have to take you 
over to the other side and I don't want to take all day doing this.  Now 
either stand still so I can knock you out, or come with me peacefully."

You're already dead, DUMMY!
Now, either...

"DEAD!!!  I'm not dead!"

DEAD?!?!?! Did a Question mark hurt you in your past life or something?

"Oh...  Then what do you call it.  You just saw your body, no one can hear 
or see you, and you just saw the big light.  Don't you know anything, 
you're supposed to go into the light you moron.  Now let's just go, I have 
problems of my own right now.  I still have some bugs I need to get out of 
the main system."

"Oh? Then what do you call it?
Don't you know anything?  You're ..... light, you moron!

"That's just tooooo bad.  I see this isn't going to be easy, look I have an 
invoice for you right here...  I mean here...  wait...  WHERE IS IT?"

easy.  Look, I...

"Where's wait?"

I think you mean: "Where's what?"
and good for you! You used a question mark!

"Your paperwork.  Great now I've lost your invoice slip, I guess I have to 
do it again we get to the other side.  Thank goodness I have it saved on my 
computer.  Hm...  Anyway, for the last time STAND STILL!"

Great, now... slip.  I guess

Skuld jumped into the air and quickly shot back down with her mallet 
centered in on Ryouga.  "This is for your own good.  Trust me," she said as 
her mallet was just about to make contact with his head.

mallet, centering it on
Trust me."  she...

An usual occurance happened.  It passed clean through him.  Both Ryouga and 
Skuld looked in amazement at what had happened.

So it happens all the time? :)
' An unusual occurance happened. The mallet passed...

"What the...   Hold on," said Skuld as she quickly pulled out a small 
portable computer from her bag.  Her eyes wavered quickly over the 
information that was on the screen.

"What the?  Hold on." said..

"What is it?"

"I can't believe this.  Your status has been changed from Lost Soul to 
Ghost, because of your unfinished business.  My mallet was set for Lost 
Soul.  Why does this have to be so hard."

... be so hard?"
Didn't she first say, in "the last snowfal" that he wasn't lost anymore? O_~ 
I guess poor Ryouga-sama's is "Eternally lost" ::sighs::

"What's happening?"

"Your statue changed, seeing that the contract that I had; said to retrieve 
Ryouko Habiki status Lost Soul and you're now classified as a Ghost, it is 
null inviod."

I think you mean status, not statue. and plus, I don't think you need a ";" 
there.
"....retrieve Ryouko Habiki, status "Lost Soul", and since you're now 
classified as "Ghost", it has become null and void."

Ryouga> But I'm not "Ryouko Habiki" I'm Ryou-GA HI-biki.
Skuld> ::blinks:: Oh... ::Looks at the computer files:: Oh my!  Our Bad! 
Sorry for the mix up then, bye! ::leaves in a flash of light::
Ryouga> ::is left, alone in the darkness.  No bright light, nothing.  He 
blinks:: HEY!  WHAT AM I SUPPOSED TO DO NOW! COME BACK HERE!!

"That means I get to live again."

Well.. This could be taken as a statement or a question, so I'll leave it 
be.

Skuld looked at him and placed her hand on her face as she shook her head.  
"You can't be that stupid?" she said as she sighed out.

use more emphisis on "that" use asterix or dashes
"You can't be *That* stupid!" or "You can't be _that_ stupid!"
oh.. and no question marks here. sorry.

"Hold your horses, there are some rules you have to know first.

first:

1. You are invisible to everyone except animals.
   However, someone may see you due to the
   extreme emotions they have for you.
2. You can take the form of an animal if you need to be
   seen by someone, but not in your human form

can we say, "forshadowing" here? :)
Ranma> ::pales as he see's the black kawaii pig, with the murky yellow 
headband float toward him.
P-chan> Bweee! BWEEEE! O_~

3. You can only touch or moving something if you know
   how to channel all of your emotions into it.
4. Possesing something or someone can take a lot of
   energy from you.
5. If you need to get somewhere or find someone, just
   think about it or them and you'll be teleported
   there.

Oh my.. with Ryouga's messed up head, I wonder how that'll turn out.
Ryouga blinks at his surroundings.  It looked like Akane's room, but then 
many rooms looked like Akane's.  He sighed.  Fustrated beyond belief, he 
released his anger the only way he knew how.
"WHERE THE HELL AM I?"
Suddenly he wasn't at the Tendo Dojo.  Stagmites dripped blood all around 
him, Guysers of fire errupted, scorching his skin.  Suddenly, an ominous 
beast stood over him.  Very much like Tarou's yetti form, only without the 
tenticles and a lot more red.  He spoke in a deep voice.
"WELCOME! TO HELL! MUAHAHAHA... *Hack* *COUGH-COUGH*!  'Scuse me! Sorry 
'bout dat! 'Ello there. Name's Beelzebub.  'Eu can col me Satan if ya wants. 
  'Eu got a reservation? Con't come to de hippist place belo' earth without 
a reservation!"

Okay.. maybe not. O_~

Now that you know the formalities.  Try to get that business taken care of 
quickly.  I have to finish my other tasks so I'll leave you here.  You 
won't be able to get to the other side until your status changes back to 
Lost Soul."

...formalities, try to....

Skuld closed up here laptop and stuffed it back in her bag.  She then 
headed back toward the light and entered it.  Ryouga watched her as the 
light began to dwindle down and both her and the light faded completely 
away.  At that point he was still in a small state of shock.  He dropped 
down into a sitting position on the ground and began to think about his 
situation.  However, his mind wondered a little on Akane.  In the blink of 
an eye he found himself sitting on the floor of Akane's bedroom as she was 
comming in from the shower.

up her laptop..

"What am I doing in here.......   OH BOY!"

hehe Quantum Leap... hehehe

**To be Continued****


Well, I hope this hasn't bored any of you.  The next chapter is in the 
works now.  It is written in second person perpective.  It changes with the 
people who are being (Haunted) at the time being.

If there are any comments or concerns.  Please send them, cause I know 
someone out there is going to wonder when did the Goddess Delivery Service 
become a soul collection agency.

Bye till the next enstallment droppes.

Would absolutly love to see this continued. If you need a pre-reader for 
mindless comments, i'm the one to call! :)

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Ja ne!  (Stop this Crazy thing!)
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