From: Lawrence Chu <chu_bear@HOTMAIL.COM>

This was scary. I can actually see Kuno writing something like this! ^_^

Minor nit:

'You have saved me!' cried the Beauteous Tendo Akane.  'I shall gladly
date with you!'  'No,' intoned the Righteous Kuno Tatewaki, 'I shall
gladly date with YOU.'

<snip>

'I shall date you both!' proclaimed the Legendary Kendo Champion Kuno
Tatewaki, to the joy of the ladies.  'Ay,' sayeth the...er...Lovely
Tendo Akane with a mischievous grin, 'and I know of a means to begin
our courtship...'

Change paragraphs when someone new speaks.

[In order to preserve this fic's "All Audiences" rating, this part of
the fic, including the 20-page lemon scene, had to be cut.  Apologies
to those who were looking forward to it.  And for those who were
wondering, the line "I'll show YOU what can be done with a pointy
stick" is not included.--ed.]

Aww... It would have been a great line to put in there if you ask me.


Emily Siazon
"Do the words: 'hung like a hamster' sound familiar?"
     -"Stranger Jarod" by Witch1