Sorry, I got about 1/3 way through before giving up due to spelling errors 
and lack of proper puncation. Skimmed the rest, though. So far it doesn't 
look like there's any plot in here. About as appealing as listening to a 
conversation of several distantly-related cousins and nephews of yours 
(though I wouldn't know). But as you had warned earlier, the start's bit slow 
so I'll give you the benefit of doubt for now. I'd suggest that you revise 
this fic first.

Use the spell-checker! Repeated spelling errors are as worse as formatting 
errors. Be careful.

Oh, by the way, hentai and sensei were misspelled frequently in your fic. You 
figure out which term I'm referring about.


Until I find something new to write, Ja ne-

Dark Alpha <AlphSailor@aol.com> formerly Sailor Alpha
     Fanfics, projects at http://www.gehirn.com/ | gehirn = brain in German

"In the name of the Moon, I will let my friend Sailor Moon punish you!"
                    -Sailor Mercury, Alternate Visions, part 4