I must say I was very glad by the time I reached the end of the
chapter, and relieved. One of the many mistakes, IMO, that many
authors make in humorous fics is that they ignore the effect the
so call humor has on peoples' feelings. Being whacked in he head
repeatedly is far from humorous to me.
However, with your mix of humor and seriousness you've kept me
not only interested, but enthralled. If you'd left out the feelings
and hence the development of the characters, this would have been
trash bait, but you didn't. As such, this is one that will
definitely stick around on my hard drive. Excellent work. I'm sorry
to say I have no specific commentary at this time, except for the
following bit. <G>
"D.F. Roeder" wrote:
Cologne blinked slowly for several seconds... and, in a manner
befitting her status as Matriarch, fell off of her staff in a
supreme face-fault.
ROFLMAO!
P.S. Waiting with baited breath for the next chapter!