Jayson Deare wrote:
I sent this fic to the lsit once a long tiem ago. This is still jsut
the prologue but it has goen through some major revisions enjoy
Eek! Take the scarey spelling away!
Neon Genesis Evangelion: 4047
Prologue
Ok this is our new series. The characters are completely new as is
theway the world looks. This is
only the prologue settingthe stage for the story. This story is written
on a conclusion that I made
from End of Evangelion. We will soon have a web page up. E-mail Jayson
Deare and Kaoru
Nagisa at eva4047@touji.zzn.com we will gladly tell you of any thing
else you would like to
know and we will release the address of the page soon.We have a 7-man
team working on this
project so prepare for a VERY longs story. Our artist consist of Miyu
Chan, Akito Tenka,
Briareos Kerensky, Chris Complier, and Kaoru Nagisa. Hopefully we will
get positive feedback,
pleas do e-mail us and tell us you comments about everything so far...
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Neon Genesis Evangelion: 4047
Prologue
Opening Soon: "Cruel Angels THESE" sung by Yuko
"Thesis"
Miyamura(Asuka), Megumi Hayashibara (Rei) and Kotono
Mitsuishi (Misato)
Year: 4031
(Scene A dark room with nearly no light twelve
monoliths are arranged
in a circle. Each monolith says 'SEPH', then a number
and 'SOUND ONLY'.)
(Scene: An almost unlit room with twelve monoliths arranged
in a circle. Each monolith displays 'SEPH', then a number,
then 'SOUND ONLY'.)
Seph-01: So the time draws near again. Yes apparently history will
Yes, apparently history will
repeat itself once more. The
conditions are once again the way they were on Earth 6062 years ago.
once again as they were on Earth 6062 years ago.
Seph-11: How much time remains before we can expect the objects to
arrive?
Seph-03: According to the information contained in the laptops and the
Dead Sea Scrolls we can
expect impact to arrive in approximately one years time.
year's
Seph-01: How goes the preparations for the arrival.
question mark.
Seph-05: Unfortunately they do not go well. The three laptops which
comma after "Unfortunately"
contain the true history of
the world do not point out the location of NERV the Magi computer
comma after "NERV"
system or the location of the
Nine crucified ones.
do not capitalise "nine" unless you delete or capitalise "crucified ones"
Seph-04: Yes the information along those lines is pretty sketchy. The
diaries of the Ikari and his
wife both confirm that they discovered the Units and that they
discovered the Geo Front. Ikari
wrote in his diary that he had hidden away the secret to rediscovering
Nerv and the Geo Front
somehow.
Seph-10: Ikari never supported the actions of our
predecessors SEELE. He refused to be their pawn and is personally
responsible for their failure. If
he had not wished for humans to be as they were we would all be one.
Seph-08: The old men of SEELE were fools and we shall succeed were they
have failed.
Seph-01: Yes we shall
missing period
Seph-06: Does it present a problem that Lilith and Adam has switched
roles.
question mark
Seph-02: According to the documents, which were
uncovered recently Adam was not necessary in initiating 3rd impact.
Adam was
simply kept at Nerv so that no Angel could have it.
Seph-01: We must discover the location of Nerv and Geo
Front because it will give us an advantage that SEELE never had. It is
essential to completion of our Scenario.
No it won't. Do not capitalise "scenario", or use "The Scenario"
Seph-05: We know where NERV and Tokyo-3 were located on the island of
Japan we must
Period after "Japan"
simply discover what nation is the one that was once Japan. Due to
"island" rather than "nation" I think.
major changes in geography
that occurred during third impact discovering it's location will be
difficult.
Seph-01: We must us the records to their fullest potential. Copies of
"use"
the laptops hard drives, the
video files and the complete world history are being made. You shall
receive them when they are
completed. The originals shall not be touched unless absolutely
necessary.
Just then A light when on above a table. On the table were 3 ancient
laptops each had a 50 gigabyte hard drive that was packed full of
information. There were a stack
of CD's and a camcorder. If you looked closely you could see on the
Laptops names. One read
Shinji Ikari, The other Asuka Langley Soryu but the Soryu had a been
crossed out and Ikari had been written in above it. The other read
Kensuke Aida and so did the camcorder.
Seph-04: It is unfortunate that the only copy of the Dead Sea scrolls
we have is the one that Ikari copied himself. They're may be segments
There may be segments
missing. The originals still exist but they are hidden along with,
Oh come on. How would they know that originals still exist?
NERV, The Magi and the Nine production model Evas.
That should be just "the Nine" or "the nine production model Evas"
Seph-03: This meeting is hear by adjourned for the present we shall
hearby adjourned. We shall
reconvene in 10hrs.
All of the monoliths vanish
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(Caption)
(Excerpt for the Diaries of Shinji Ikari)
Excerpt from
It has been 5 years since 3rd impact. Asuka and I are
starting to get used to being the only humans alive. If you can ever
get used to something like that.
Sentence fragment
We have a house now and we have
gotten and old electric plant running. Things seem more like they
an old electric
And incidentally, I doubt that two people could get a major electric
plant running.
used to. We can't watch TV but we can watch movies and play Hikari's
Sega Saturn. Most of the movies we watch are Kensuke's. I really miss
him
and Touji. If only I could have........ No, no more regretting and
looking
back. Things are starting to look up. At least we are adjusting to the
new scenery.
I'll return to writing just after I go check on Asuka.
She's sound asleep. Now I can right this down without her
write this down
seeing this. I want exploring early
this morning. We go exploring everyday to try to discover things from
the past and other humans.
We know there are no humans left but us but it is a hope that keeps us
going. We have found
many things in our explorations trips. Today I went without Asuka
explorations. Today I went
because she was tired. I
traveled up to a region of the land that we moved away from because
Asuka could not stand the
sight of the crucified Eva-05 series. Around there I discovered the Geo
Front and the
remains of NERV. I'm not writing down the exact location of NERV
because it must never be
known there are to many secret's in there that must remain hidden.
>From whom? So far as he knows, the human race is extinct.
known. There are too many secrets in there
Inside NERV I discovered the MAGI computer system was
completely intact. I was able to access it. The Magi contained
extremely complete records of
world history, Second and Third Impact, The Evas, The Angels and
certain other projects that I
still can't talk or write about.
Same objection.
Using the Magi I was able to activate
the 9 of the Eva-05 series. The
other I was able to get them to enter NERV.
The other what?
They are now all currently
stored inside NERV. I
should have destroyed them for what they did to the woman of my dreams,
the woman that I love
more than my own life. But I couldn't I had to save them who knows if
couldn't. I had to save them since who knows if the angels will ever
return. Inside Nerv, I made another
angels will ever return in
the future. Inside Nerv I made another startling discovery. I
discovered the Dead Sea scrolls. I did
not have time to read all of them but they convinced me that NERV and
Eva are essential to
mankind. Therefore I must go back there tomorrow and read. I will then
Copy them onto this
I must go back tomorrow and read. I will then copy them into this
computer and seal away NERV, I hope forever. But just in case the
world ever needs NERV again a way will be left for it to return.
computer and seal away NERV forever. But just, just in case the world
ever need NERV again it
will return. How I will not say because I can't. I will never write the
location of
NERV down because in the future when the world is back to the way it
used to be when I
lived in it people will use it for the wrong reasons.
Delete "in the future". Comma after "it"
What makes him think the world will ever be back to the way it used to be?
It was never used
for the right reasons but I
will not give anyone the chance to unless it absolutely necessary.
it becomes absolutely necessary.
I
will tell Asuka about NERV
and I will take her there because there are things she must see andknow
and know.
for herself. I will also
personally make sure that this never happens again how I don't know
yet.
comma after "happens"
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(Caption)
Year: 4031
Day: July 5th
(Scene: The dark room once again with the twelve
monoliths)
delete "with the twelve monoliths"
Seph-05: We have at last located NERV. Ikari had it
hidden quite well the sole reason we discovered it was because it
Start a new sentence with "The sole reason"
wanted to be discovered. Ikari
had created a program that reacts to the Angels and to Eva . The MAGI
detected the approaching
objects and activated a homing signal. Apparently this happened once
before in
the Year 1015 A.I when our first impact occurred.
First Impact
Seph-04: What is the condition of Eva and the Magi computer system.
Question mark
Seph-05: Only one of the Eva-05 series remains apparently the rest were
destroyed during our
first impact.
Start a new sentence with "Apparently". First Impact.
Actually, that doesn't make any sense. The "first" First Impact was the
dinosaur killer and happened millions of years ago. At the moment they should
be just approaching Fourth Impact
Seph-02: Does the dummy plug system still work?
Seph-05: Unfortunately that is the only thing that is missing. The
dummy plugs and the data that
we would require to make the dummy plugs have been erased. Apparently
the Ikari's wanted
Ikaris
anyone to have to use pilots, they did not want anyone to be able to
comma splice
control
the Evas completely.
Seph-08: What of the pilots?
Seph-05: There are no pilots currently living. The MAGI have an
intricate network of cloaked satellites that they have been using to
monitor the world's history and
the status if Eva pilots for the pats 4031 years. The MAGI contain
"of Eva pilots for the past"
accurate video records of
the world's history which can only be comprehend thanks to the writings
"comprehended"
of the historians who had
the laptops and wrote the names of places and important people. This
video record is extremely
accurate and completely backs up the historical records.
That's absurd. History is never that accurate.
Seph-09: Do they contain any records of past pilots?
Seph-05: Unfortunately they do not since NERV was never fully manned
and operational, it was simply used that one time in 1015.
Seph-06: What was NERV used for in 1015?
Seph-05: That was yet to be determined since the video records could
not be completely
analyzed.
Who used it? The vidio records should tell them that.
Seph-01: When will there be pilots available to pilot the Evangelion
Units?
Seph-05: According to the Magi's calculations the pilots will be born
sometime after our second
impact.
after Fourth Impact.
Seph-11: Do you have an idea how the Magi's homing beacon works?
Seph:05: That has yet to be determined it is quite strange though it is
Is it radio, or did someone just suddenly know where NERV was? If it is
radio, there's no big mystery.
shut down now and no one
will be able to discover NERV's location.
That sentence doesn't make any sense.
There are still many
mysteries and it will take time
to uncover them all.
Seph-02: Where is NERV currently located.
Seph-05 it's currently located under the country of Yanimura.
Specifically under the city oh
If "oh" is part of the city's name then it should be "Oh Naipon"
Naipon. The Geo Front was filled with water so we had to go in as
with divers
divers. The HQ however was
protected for the water due to the way it was sealed up.
from the water.
Seph-01: That is understood but everything appears to be satisfactory?
Seph-05: Everything is ready the Dead Sea Scrolls are still intact and
Start a new sentence with "The"
can now be used to develop
our scenario.
Seph-01: Then everything is as it should be except for the loss of the
dummy plug system.
Seph-05: Yes it is.
Seph-01: Seph-05 due to your outstanding work you shall be put in
command of NERV once it is
made operation therefore your position in this council shall be given
to another your duties now
Start a new sentence with "Your"
lie with NERV. This in no way means that you will be cut out of the
loop. SEELE did
that to Gendo Ikari and because of this their plan failed.
SEELE allowed Gendo Ikari to do that, and that is why their plan failed.
Seph-05: Thank you.
Seph-12: Now all that remains is the arrival of Evangelion Unit-01 and
the Lance of Longinus
then we may begin production of our own Eva's and our own human
Evas
instrumentality project.
Seph-03: We now have to tools necessary to beat the angels when they
return
Seph-01: The time will come soon and we will succeed where SEELE
failed.
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Flashback
year 60 A.I
Shinji sat with Asuka in NERV headquarters. They had told their
children the truth about
everything at last and why the way the world was the way it was today.
comma after and before "at last"
They had entrusted them
with the 3 labtops and the collected knowledge of the 20th century. The
three laptops
I doubt that three laptops could contain the collected knowledge of the 20th
century.
knowledge that They had
they had
saved. They did now however reveal the location of NERV HQ. Shinji and
not, however
her both new the
knew
sacrifices that they would have to make to prevent third impact from
Third Impact
ever happening again that is
and that is why they were here
why they were here. They sat in NERV headquarters enjoying the last
moments they would spend
together. Shinji new that this event must not be recorded ever, for if
Shinji knew that this event must not be rccorded if mankind was ever to
to have a chance to be free of this vicious cycle.
mankind was ever going to
have a chance to be free of this vicious cycle it must be done. Shinji
What vicious cycle?
walked over to
the MAGI and made sure that none of the events that would happen here
today would be
Stop repeating yourself.
recorded he gave Asuka a hug and a kiss which she returned to him with
Start a new sentence with "He gave"
a passion they both
shared for each other. Then they broke the embrace they each had tears
When they broke their embrace, each had tears in their eyes.
in their eyes. Asuka
walked deeper into NERV and to her destiny. Shinji sat in the control
room waiting
for his time to come when he must complete his destiny as well. Then a
Shinji sat in the control room, waiting for the time to complete his
destiny as well.
slight beep from the
MAGI informed him that his time had come. He stood up and left NERV.
Outside his destiny
awaited him.
His destiny awaited him outside.
He said to himself that he mustn't run away. He took one
step forward and made his
sacrifice for humanity. Shinji and Asuka both vanished forever without
a trace that day.
No they didn't. They may have vanished forever, but not without a trace.