At 06:46 PM 7/19/99 +1000, Phil wrote:

I really did like this fic. I hope that you do continue it.
The idea of Ranma as a pansy has been bounced
around the FFML before, but this is the first truly
good execution that I've seen (or can remember :).

I think the Ranma in A Man's Man would object to being called
a pansy. Quite simply, he isn't, not really. He just likes
men... oh yes, and the curse. Doesn't want to become a woman,
doesn't do the make-up, drag-queen, speak with a lisp type of
thing-- very much a rugged, macho type of guy, really....
In fact, it could be (whether or not it should is beside the
point) that this Ranma is even more of a misogynist than the
original one-- taking the 'girls are weak' line of argument
a step or two farther, until we get 'boys are better than
girls' (not too far down the logic chain, really), and thus
his preference for males. Also could be interpreted as a
reference to a narcisisstic nature, since a male would be more
similar to Ranma than a female (although now that he's got the
curse....)
	(Just had to get that of me chest, that's all. One of the
things I wanted to put in this was that homosexuality=light in
the britches is not necessarily true.)

Anyway, a few comments below.

Matthew Lewis wrote:

Warning: For Women Only-- You Pansy Men ^_^

Ranma 1/2 is Rumiko Takahashi's, yadda yadda yadda.
C&C is the polite thing to do, yadda yadda yadda.
(trying to keep my notes and stuff short this time,
yadda yadda yadda) ^_^

Reminds me of a Seinfeld episode ...

Oddly enough, I was reminded of probably that very same
Seinfeld episode when I wrote it. I'm still suffering from
withdrawal of a lack of long, confusing, rambling and utterly
irrelevant and useless notes, before and after the fic, I'd like
to add hear (I'm suffering for all of your sakes!) ^_^
 

    The young woman raised her fist and posed dramatically towards
the towering panda. "How will I ever find the man of my dreams with
a body like this?"
    Men up and down the street turned their heads. One of them
could be the man of her dreams. The panda, undeterred by her
argument, smacked her upside the head with some generic roadsign.

argument? more like a question, no?

Argument in the sense of a debate, or a point. One side's argument is
presented, explained, et cetera....

    Akane's face darkened. "I hate boys," she said in a voice
matching her face.

'that matched' perhaps

    Ranma's reply was that, "Not all boys are bad. Some can be
quite... dreamy," in a voice matching the warm, dreamy look on her
face.

Structure of this sentence could used some work.

Meant to be somewhat odd-- specifically the latter part to mirror the
previous sentence. --Will think about changing, mind you (just because
I argue against something doesn't mean I'm not considering it. Usually
that just means I'm looking at pros and cons).

    "You sound like Nabiki. The world doesn't revolve around boys."
    Ranma shrugged and left the dojo.

, thinking, "Yes, it does. Yes, it does."

I was thinking about having Ranma make a remark somewhat like that,
perhaps an, "Well, it should!" but decided to just leave Ranma silent
(for once ^_^ ).

    "Akane, what are you doing?" Kasumi asked, noting her youngest
sister's heaving boulders in the yard (to be fair it was really

'course, she hasn't thrown the boulder yet ...

Heaving it overhead, at any rate.... 

only one boulder, but was very large and could easily make two or
more boulders, so such a mistake can be forgiven).
    "Do you know your towel fell, Akane?" Nabiki asked.
    Akane looked down and noticed her state. The boulder fell.

Nice little twist.

It just felt right. It's not like I really have a problem with subtle
humour-- I don't do it, and there's no problem! :)

    "Why would I want to do that?" he replied, perplexed. It was at
this moment that he became a she, due to the liberal and accidental
application of not-warm water via an old lady watering the walk in

Technically speaking, hot water is not-warm. My, aren't I being picky?

But the previous part of the sentence further helps the reader find out
that the water is cold, or at least cold enough.... ^_^

Let me also interject a poor Kasumi comment here.

    "Ah, er, what are you talking about?"

Akane won't be happy when she realizes, will she?

And also a reference to fics which summarily decide that Akane is a
lesbian, one of the motivators for this fic, really (not just Akane,
but various anime females whom have no real indication of lesbianism,
and/or have indications of heterosexuality-- Priss from BGC had a
boyfriend, y'know. Real upset he died and all that).

    "I must make him mine!" Ranma said to himself, too quietly for
the others to hear, though both Akane and the newcomer could feel
the determination pouring from Ranma in waves.
    "Oh, hi Kuno-sempai," Akane said listlessly.
    "You know him, Akane?" Ranma asked.
    "Who are you to speak so freely with the beauteous Akane?" Kuno
bellowed-- his voice rich and resonant.

A very difficult feat - bellowing yet sounding rich and resonant. I'm
nottoo surprised that Kuno can do it though.

Incidentally, I think once and a while I'm actually able to pull it off
^_^ (well, I've been told that my voice is/can be resonant, and I'm
certainly loud....)

    "I'm--"
    "Is it not good manners to introduce one's self first? Very
well then! I am Tatewaki Kuno, rising star of the kendo world and
the Blue Thunder of Furinkan High!"
    Ranma sighed and smiled like a predator-- oh yes, Tatewaki just
needed the right man to set him to rights --Ranma vowed to himself
that he would be that man. "I'm the heir to the Saotome School of
Anything Goes Martial Arts, Ranma Saotome, and I'm sta--"

'Are you single by any chance?'

Must use that somewhere when some guy challenges Ranma-- too good to
pass up. ^_^

    "No! If you win, I'll go out with you. However, if _I_ win,
then you have to go out with Ranma Saotome!" It was a win-win
situation. If Ranma won (which she was, of course, confident of
doing), then Tatewaki would go on a date with him; if, on the off
chance that Ranma lost-- well then, there's a kettle of hot water
around still, and....

Ranma Saotome thinking of losing? And planning ahead? Obviously,being
gay must increase intell ... actually, I better not make comments
like those - being macho must decrease intelligence then (in for a penny

Yeah, I was kind of at odds putting in the comment about it being a win-
win situation for Ranma (well, explaining it, at least), because Ranma
himself wouldn't contemplate losing. The narrator, on the other hand,
might, and might insert it into the narrative of Ranma's thoughts
(hence the lack of use of quotes to denote actual thoughts. Damn sneaky
of the narrator, eh? Gotta watch for stuff like that-- narrators are
shifty, immoral bastards, the lot of 'em!) ^_^

I wanna see ... to use a famous phrase - more, please!

Ask, and ye shall receive-- just don't expect me to be
quick about it, that's all ^_^
(plotting of part 2 has commenced. Think I've figured out
how I'm going to start it, as well)

Hope this helps.

Yup! Thanks!

Phil - likes the concept and execution (what about Nodoka?)

Yes, it should be fun to see what happens when Genma finds out
his little gaffe all those years ago.... ^_^

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