On Tue, 20 Jul 1999, Samantha Williams wrote:

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Redemption
by Soul Survivor
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Ah, a punner!  That's one notch up in my favor already.  I'd be careful of
the title, though.  I'm pretty sure that the title 'choices' has been
already used.  Not that it means anything legally, but if you had another
choice in mind, it might save later confusion.

First Fic Alert - Be Gentle!

Be gentle?  Hell, let me shake your hand!  There are so few Ranma and
Kodachi fics around that I want to mallet those people who always blabber
that there's nothing more to be done in Ranma fanfiction.  (I tried
myself once or twice, but I tend to be better at silly things)

Anyway, use a spellecker, and give your fic the once-over before releasing
it next time.  Most of the stuff I mention is just correcting typos.

"..." Denotes Speach
-...- Denotes Thoughts

Why -...-?  Just write using ordinary conventions.

The evening breeze swept over Nerima, bringing relief from the days heat, 
kicking up leaves and general debris in the streets.  It also cooled the 
brow of a certain pigtailed martial artist relaxing on top of the Furinkan 
Clock Tower avoiding the general chaos that surrounded her life.

No sign of average day/mallet/new challenger cliche opening.  Good.

For the first time in days, Ranma-Chan felt at peace, no fiancee's chasing 
him, no rivals attacking him, no parents pressuring him to marry anybody.

-chan should be lowercase.  It's a suffix.

...with no fiancee's...
  

Not even being in her cursed form disturbed her serenity at this point.

"Waaah!  It's a cursed girl!"
"Aw, quit it already, Usagi!"

Sorry, I've recently been reading the scripts to SM eps, and I had to make
the pun...

Without 
concious thought she made her way back to where Kodachi continued her 
monolouge.

Ranma's a zombie!  Or did you mean 'Without conciously thinking about
it...'?

"... dont know who I think Im fooling, mother" she sobbed "he will never 
love me, no one will.  I dont know what to do anymore, no matter how I try, 
he rejects me, over and over, I.... I cant take anymore, mother.  He is the 
only bright spot in my life, he chases the monsters away.... Heh... then 
again, mother, that is the problem, you see, to him I am a monster, I can 
see it in his eyes, I can feel his fear, his revulsion when I stand before 
him, there is nothing I can do to change that. 

That's a pretty damn long sentence.  Now, if she's getting hysterical,
that's fine because most people who are upset don't think about grammer.
But you don't indicate this, or give it any support in her action.  The
following lines quoted text don't support it either.

He will always chase me 
away, like the monster that I am," quiet revulsion fills her words

fills = filled

 "but then 

again, I gave hime

hime = him.

him, drugged him, threatened those close to him.... Ive made myself into the 
moster that he fights, mother, the foul creature that he defends his friends 

I've, monster.

Now, here you also have a run-on sentence, but this time, the context,
mode of speech, and punctuation support the hysteria feeling.  So, don't
change this, but change the previous one.

herself to fall.  Attempting to restrain her physically would be far to 

to = too

dangerous, there was less than a foot of space on the ledge, and no real 

...as there was...

hand holds at all.  If she were away from the ledge, the chances of stopping 
her would go up exponentially, if ranma where in male form, that would be 
easy, simply stand at the center of the tower and call out to Kodachi, hell, 
doing that he would need a crowbar to remove her

Capitalize 'ranma'.  Another long sentence that could be broken up.

.  For the first time that 

night, Ranma-chan silently cursed the old washer woman that had soaked her 

The way Ranma acts, I'd think that it would be the second time.  But
that's just a minor quibble...

on her way here -Talking to her as I am now would simply provoke an 
attac....  Of course!!  I'ts just as ood, stand in the center, piss her off, 

I'ts = It's.

ood = odd (unless you mean Object Oriented Design)

Perfect, the perfect position to stop her, the perfect phrase to get her to 
fly off the handle, everything was perfect... except that Kodachi was not 
cooperating.

Normally, I would point out the repetitiveness of the word, but it was
obviously intended here.  I suggest that you change the beginning to this,
though.

Perfect; the perfect position...

A semicolon is used to link two sentences that could be used
independently, but the writer wants linked.  I personally think that
most people who use them actually overuse them, but they come in handy at
times.

"You...  somehow it is fitting that you should be here." her voice was 
devoid of any emotion, her eyes had no spark at all "Tell Ranma-sama that I 
love him... and that I apologize for my behavior"  with that, she simply let 
herself fall forward, off the roof.

Wait.  If she's falling forward, then Ranma shouldn't be able to tell that
her eyes have no spark (unless Kodachi's trying to jump off the wrong side
of the ledge.  And in Ranma, I wouldn't put it past anyone!).  She ought
to be falling backwards.

"Im sorry, Kodachi" she whispered, "I'm so sorry...."  Gathering the 

Im = I'm


-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble.  A few more shots, then 
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode.  Ducking around a corner, 
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of 
my Anime supplier.

One look at his face and I knew that I was betrayed.  "Tell me."
I insisted.  He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance.  Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao." he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the 
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...