Hi, Kenko.  I just read your fic.  I'll be straight
with you.  I won't tell you it's good.  That would be
sort of... unnecessary? ^_^  Unfortunately, I haven't
read Girl Days yet... signed on the FFML only
recently, and couldn't get the first chapters.  Could
you please tell me where I can get them?  Thanks.
   Anyway, about this great fic... (I didn't say
"good", okay? :) I'm not that good at C&C, so I'll
just stick to spelling/grammar mistakes.  Well,
onward!

familiar.  Also in which a certain Sorceress finds a
possible hint to
the realisation of certain dreams, both of potential

realization.  Gomen, I'm picky. 

neck practically screamed "This Bad Place, We Go
NOW".  She knew that
SOMETHING was really wrong here.

Heh.  I like that the scream is in broken Japanese, a
la Jusenkyo guide.

Ranma with a
actinic glare.

 with an actinic glare
 

abilities to handle
it.,, as long as you keep in mind that this IS real.

to handle it...
 

	"No, I don't.  I have blue eyes, her's are more
red..."

hers are more red

holding very large swords, clubs, and things like
that there, all of
who were ugly as sin and leering.  Thinking back to

all of whom were

where the nearest telephone is a five hundred years
away at least.

telephone is five hundred

Besides, there's no real police that I remember from
teh series

the series

blue eyes, where
your's are more reddish..."

yours are more
 

	Akane nodded.  "No way is this a coincidence. 
We're being set
up, just like you said."

	"But it's still our best chance to get home."

	"That's true... I guess we don't have a lot of a
choice.  And I'm
hungry."

	"Same here, Ranma.  Okay, Gabriev-san, we're
accepting your
invitation."

Um... shouldn't this be Ranma talking?  Why would she
say "Same here, Ranma"?  It should be "Same here,
Akane."  (Akane said they're being set up, Ranma
answered it was still their best chance, Akane says
she's hungry, so now it's Ranma's turn to reply--"Same
here.")

	"Ranma's sort of both male and female... mostly a
guy, but she
can deal with being a girl.  She's had special
training," Akane
explained.

Hmm... Like I said, I haven't read girl days, but it's
sort of... sad/disturbing that Ranma's now "mostly" a
guy instead of all guy.  Even more disturbing to think
of him as "both".

offer a warm friendly drink to passersby, but rather
something
bubbling, fuming, and invariably toxic, metamorphic,
or both.

Well, he's got nothing on Akane's cooking. ;) 

Ah, Inverse, or her "cousin' Lina alone, but rather

or her "cousin" Lina

	With these two teamed up, "go wrong" is yet another
inadaqaute
term.

inadequate

Ranma.  I also want a
cookie.  A chocolate chip cookie with sprinkles. 
And beer (but not
on the cookie).

Sorry, can't help you there. ;)  Anyway, I'm eagerly
waiting for the next install ment. 

K-chan
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"There are two things I cannot stand: one is
intolerance, the other is hypocrisy."
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