They lived in their parents
smalls house,
being taken care of by servants and using their families fortune, until they
were old
enough to get jobs and move out.

Parents Smalls house? Grandparent Smalls house, Parents
small house.
Using their families fortune; why move out? Did the Fortune
run out or what?

closests; closest
monsterious, monstrous or mysterious
Wasnn't; wasn't

As for the idea, of the story it was fairly good. Unusual at
least, I will admit to wondering who Grandpa was and why
they had to move out of the old home. I also wonder who and
why Ranma is dreaming about. When do they meet Tuxedo Mask?
Well hopefully you will answer some of these in the next
chapter.

I noticed you didn't use a spell check program, here is a
low level word processing program with a spell check
included for free. I use it a fair amount, in fact I changed
my wordpad program to cwordpad in windows because of it's
superiority.

--
Rick Robinson
RICHARDROBINSONJR@prodigy.net


If violence is not solving your
problems you're just not using enough of it.

     Misato

"I guess I'm just an old-fashioned sentimentalist at heart.
I refuse
 to accept a no-win scenario.  I hate the thought of a
universe without
 justice.  If the maneuverings of dark powers can't be
exposed and
 defeated by the pure of heart, then there's no point in
anything.  I
 can't believe that."
                               -- Benjamin Hutchins