From: dar-ffml@thekeep.org
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML][Fic][EVA][Lemon] Draft: ritsuko's problem
Date: Sat, 10 Jul 1999 19:10:27 -0400

As the subject reads, this work is a lemon;  it contains scenes of explict
sex.  If this offends you, don't read it.  Or just skip the juicy parts.
They're part of the story, but the details aren't that important.  If
there's enough call for it, I may do a version that's only 'lime',
containing no explict sex.

This is a very rough draft.   I estimate it's about one third to one half
of the story.  I'd be most glad if people would take a look at this and
tell me what they think.  It's only partially edited so far, I'm mostly
hoping to elicit general reactions (sucks, okay, needs more x, needs less
y, you forgot about z and a, person b would *never* do that, etc).

A special thanks to all my prereaders, who seem intent on actually making
me finish this one.  Complete credits appear at the end.

I like it.

It's an intelligent, sensitive, and... dare I say it? (yes, dare!)... 
sensitive romance.

There are very few of these around.

The Lemon scenes should stay. Amd I like the way you got elements of 
Ritsuko's dream flowing into her relationship with Maya.


Good work.

Waiting for more!


'There are circles to move in, and squares to avoid, but a triangle with 
four corners is probably a pyramid.'



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