From: Donny Cheng

Keiichi's just one of many clueless guys in anime/manga.  Most of which
I seem rather fond of for some reason. :P

Maybe it's because of the way girlfriends seems to just drop into their
laps?

It also would have contradicted with the manga.

Good call on that one. For those of you who never had the chance to read it,
the chapter that introduces Sayoko in the manga implies 2 things: First, she
knew of Belldandy prior to that chapter. Second, she just realised that her
boyfriend was Keiichi.

I might throw in another scene to space it out more.

That would be very good of you! I was a bit disappointed that you all but
passed over Sayoko's reaction towards losing her Queen status. It would be
great if you could show how she realises that the crowd of boys around her
is no longer as large as it once was.

My compliments on a very well written fic. With a bit of work, it should
rank with the best of AMG fics out there. Do let us read your revised
version when you're finished with it.