Dialogue and Scene Exercise....comments are welcome, any which way you
please.  Got the idea after reading through a dialogue 
exercise I did back
in 11th grade; taking Huck Finn to an all new level. ;)

	O_o You ain't kiddin' there! ;)

<snip the entire MFin' post. :)>

	I don't really have any criticism to offer, which is strange.  Aside
from typos (mostly missing ending punctuation), the only things I can
suggest relate to the story itself.  And unless there's more, well...

	My biggest question, I think, is this: is this an actual fanfic, or
are you just writing out scenes for the hell of it? ;)

	Overall, I liked the tone and feel.  I've always liked grim, gritty
atmospheres and this one seems to be just that.  Good work!

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