David Johnston <rgorman@telusplanet.net> wrote:

       [FFML] [Fanfic] I Dream of Ranma, Episode 3 

Comments:  It might be better if the moment Nabiki hears 
that wish she points and says, "Look!  Halley's Comet!"
to Mrs Saotome.  Otherwise Ranma disappearing right before
her eyes is going to undermine the idea that the oni 
problem has been solved.  

Hmmm... okay, I'll put in something to establish that Nodoka happened to
be looking away from Ranma at that moment. I don't think Nabzy would
have time to intentionally distract her before she saw what happened.

Thanks for the tip.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html