David Johnston wrote:

Subject:
        [FFML] [Ranma]Ranma-chan: Genie of the Ring chapter 07
  Date:
        Tue, 29 Jun 1999 01:23:49 GMT
  From:
        "Tom Mathews a.k.a.Disruptor" <godphoniex@HOTMAIL.COM>

Description:  Ranma, having had his female form turned into
a genie under the control of a ring worn by Akane must
learn to adjust to being his fiancee's slave.

Comments:  Ranma's decision to ask Akane to make lots of
wishes so he can practise using the genie's powers
doesn't make sense.  Either he can use her powers on his
own or he can't.  If he can't, then practise won't matter
much since they aren't really his powers, they're his
master's powers.  If he can, then he doesn't need Akane's
help to practise.

<sigh>I already established earlier that Ranma's powers are greater when
her master makes a wish.  Sure Ranma can practice the lowere range
stuff.  But for the higer end abilities, Ranma needs Akane

Spelling gets sloppy near the end of the chapter.

      "Okay then.  Ranma, I wsh that you were back in your standard _boy_ clothes
and some hot water would splash you in the face."

"wish".

       Wiping his face with his hands, Ranam stated somewhat sarcastcially,
"Thanks a lot Akane.  I really needed another bath."

"sarcastically"  Actually, "with a hint of sarcasm" might
work better.  You know, it's amazing the number of
people who are afraid to use the word "said".

I knew I forgot to do something.  I forgot to send that part top the
pre-readers.  I'd better correct that.  Sorry folks.