On Mon, 28 Jun 1999 17:49:04 +1000, you wrote:

There doesn't seem to be many alternate universe pokemon stories floating
around (one of my fave kinds of fics) so here's one from me ... and yeah
I'm using the cliched gender bending thing. But heck I can never get
tired of these types of stories ^_^;;

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            Girlemon!
   
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Fanfiction written by Ace Sanchez.
Webpage @ http://jsa.users.fl.net.au
Pokemon and its associated characters
owned by Nintendo / Gamefreak. 
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Part 1 : I Choose Her! 

The fic was a rather nice read. I can definitely get used to the name
Ashley, but Misto and Garina I'm having a bit more trouble getting
used to. I would suggest with going along with Lurker's suggestion of
Rain. Cloud will make me think of a certain 'other' person :) It'd be
nice if you changed the dialogue a lil bit more though. It's kinda
like reading an alternate Ranmafic where the first introduction is
almost written verbatim to the manga or anime. Adding a bit of
variation is nice. I liked the part with Ashley saying she had more
'talent' :) 

Concerning Misto.....I really hope you don't have him tagging along
with Ashley because he wants her to replace his motorcycle. A guy
won't be like that......that much. It'd be cool if you have it where
he's following her, saying that he wants her to pay him back, but in
reality, he could care less and just wanted to be near her. 

"Okay, if you date me, then I'll forget about the fact that you
wrecked my motorcycle,"

"Date you?! No way!!" Ashley replied, "I'd rather pay you back for the
motorcycle than date someone like you,"

"Fine," Misto smirked, "Then I'm gonna follow you until you do,"

"Argh!!!"

It'd be a shame if you have Misto acting toward Ashley like Misty acts
toward Ash in the anime. Since the role of Misty is being played by a
male, the interactions should be very different. 

I can't really say much along the lines of the actual Pokemon story
because I know very little about this series. I've only seen about
five episodes. Thankfully, it was the first five or so to the
series....




-OneShot
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