Hellos wrote this fic a while back and never really did anything with it
I could really use some C&C and opinions on it. It's the 1st fanfic I
have wrote and have no idea as to it's quality
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Disclaimer: All characters in this story belong to AIC or Pioneer they
are not mine. Please don't sue me I have no money to take hehe. I came up
with this idea when messing around on my web page with a bunch of Ryo-Ohki
pics and I came across one of her in a teenage looking humaniod form caused
by mass infusion so this is my idea I dodn't steal it unless you ask
first. Plz don't post this anywhere without my permission if you want my
permission e-mail me a mag_leith@hotmail.com.
Ok down to the story I hope it somewhat decent probably going to be
short and bad though I barely pass english...
Ten-ohki Chapter 1(v1.1)
The rain pattered softly on the roof of the Masaki house and Tenchi
stirred in bed. Yawning, he wondered about a strange dream he had with
Ryo-Ohki in her humaniod form and a giant pile of carrots. Ryo-ohki had
always looked cute in her cabbit form, but in her small child and young
adult
humaniod forms she looked even cuter, if that was possible. Tenchi, upon
hearing
Sasami in the kitchen downstairs decided to get up and rolled over coming
face
to face with a very scary looking, morning Ryoko.
"Ahhh Ryoko!!! What are you doing here? How many times do I
have to tell you not to come in my room at night?"
"Sorry Tenchi, I just want to make sure nothing happens to you,"
Ryoko said in a plaintive voice, floating toward the place he had fallen off
the
bed. "Since I'm here, why don't we have a little fun Tenchiii..."
"Eeeep"
The door bursts in as Ayeka storms in predictably. "Miss Ryoko, what do
you think you are doing with Lord Tenchi?"
"What does it look like, princess? I was giving Tenchi some morning
entertainment"
"You, you, despicable monster woman... get off Tenchi now!!"
"Hehehe well we already had a lot of fun last night." "I suppose you
can have a turn."
Energy crackled though the room as dozens of tiny logs appear in
the air.
"So you want to fight, little princess I'm ready"
Tenchi watched the fireball grow between Ryoko's hands and decided
it was a good time to leave, and quietly snuck out the door. "Hum what to
do,"
Tenchi thought as he walked down the stairs. It's raining so I can't tend to
the carrot fields and I don't want to get in the middle of a fight between
Ayeka and Ryoko. A image bubble appear above Tenchi head with him being
fried
and electruted. Major sweatdrop time...
"Tenchi," a cheerful voice called out.
"Yes Sasami, do you need anything?" Tenchi, replied poking his
head into the kitchen.
"Yes could you get Washu, breakfast is almost ready," Sasami
said without turning around from the stove.
"Umm... Sure, Sasami..." Tenchi turned around and walked towards
Washu's lab nervously. Every time he went in there, she tried to get that
damn
sample from him, which made him very anxious. The little crab doorbell
thingie
made a rattling noise as Tenchi opened Washu's Lab door and shut it behind
him. "I hate this," Tenchi thought. "Washu, Washu!, WASHU!!!" Tenchi yelled
into the empty looking lab.
"Yes Tenchi?" Washu phased in front of him.
"Umm... breakfast is almost ready, Little Washu, Sasami wanted me
to get you..." Tenchi said as he reachrf for the doorknob behind him which
had
just disappeared...
"Well, since it's only almost ready, I guess I have time to run
some experiments on you..."
"I just remembered, it's already don..." Tenchi was cut off as a
spiderey looking robot appeared behind him made a weird R2-D2 sound
and trapped him with it's metallic arms (from OVA).
A little time later... you see Tenchi equiped with the standard guinea pig
equipment. Washu appears in her nurse outfit and the dreaded sample scene
begins.
Elsewhere in the *normal* section of the Masaki household....
"I wonder what's taking Tenchi so long to get Washu... the food is
getting cold" Sasami said looking up from the table at Washu's Lab
door.
"I'll go get them," Mihoshi exclaims as she gets up and dashes
for the door.
A few minutes later in Washu's Lab...
"Trust me Tenchi, I have magic fingers"
A muffled yell was Tenchi reply.
"Oh, hi Washu are you playing doctor with Tenchi again?"
Oh can we see the star spangled sweatdropppppppp.....
"Umm... yea... ahhh don't touch that Mihoshi" Beep goes the
restraints and Tenchi is goooone..... "My, does he run fast"
"Umm Washu, why is he going that way? The exit is the other way."
"Sigh"
A little while later "34 cups of sake on the wall 34 of sake
take one down pass it around 33 cups of sake on the wall..." I wonder
when they will find me damnit I should have watched where I was going
but stupid me fell into one of Washu's damn giant test tubes Tenchi
thought... Hum what's that in the next test tube looks like Ryo-Ohki
Washu must be experimenting with a new cabbit.
"Tenchiii, where are you?"
"I'm over here, Mihoshi!!!"
"Ah, there he is, just where my automatic Tenchi sniffer said he
would be," Washu said, with a cry of delight.
"Oh Tenchi, you're stuck in the glass thingie, I'll get you out,"
Mihoshi cried, running forward to the console in front of the glass
thingie".
"Mihoshi wait!!! don't touch that!!!!!!!"
"Ooops, too late, sorry."
"Uh oh"
"What do you mean "Uh oh?" Washu just let me out of here!"
"Mihoshi jammed the panel! I can't do anything!"
"Can't you just break this tube?!?"
"Too late!!!"
The machine console started flashing and the two giant
test tubes started flashing and glowing. Pale smoke and blue liquid
fill them both as the glowing became so bright that Washu and
Mihoshi have to look away. "Crack!!!" the test tube that Tenchi was
in burst open and something fell out.
Washu quickly grabbed the object and grabbed Mihoshi and
ran for the lab exit. "Ahhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!"
"Umm... Washu, why are you screaming?"
"Because, Mihoshi, my lab is about to explode, and we're still
in it"
"Ohhh MMomieeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!"
You see two bodies jump out of the Lab door and slam it shut
behind them just as you hear a loud explosion. "Damn it Mihoshi, you
just blew up my lab and I'm going to kill you...."
"Ahhhh!!!" Mihoshi yelled as Washu tackled her.
You see the rest of the Tenchi gang except Tenchi dad (at work)
and grandfather (at shrine) run into the room.
"Washu, where's Tenchi?" Ryoko phased though the wall into the
room.
"Yes, Miss Washu, where is Lord Tenchi?" Ayeka proceeded to glare
at Ryoko and Washu.
"Well I was conducting some test on his metabolic aytilic rate
and his biofertmical.."
"What??" all
"I was doing some simple test on Tenchi when bubble head came
in, hit a bunch of button, released Tenchi, who ran in the wrong direction,
got lost, who we later found trapped in one of my test tubes. Then bubble
brain decides to hit a few more buttons and starts the machine Tenchi was
in and locks the console out, which causes an overload, which causes the
circuits to malfunction, which causes the shields around the generators
to fail."
"What?!?" all again
"Mihoshi hit buttons mess stuff up lab go booom"
"Ohhhh" all once again
"But, Miss Washu, where is Tenchi?" Ayeka this time
"Well you see in one of my latest projects I have been trying
to create a male cabbit so Ryo-Ohki wouldn't be as lonely. so I first.."
"Mom!! where is Tenchi?!?" Ryoko, of course.
"Here" Washu handed Ryoko the object she had picked up before
the lab blew.
"Huh, what's this?"
"Haven't you been listening at all little Ryoko? *Sigh* what is
a mother to do?"
"Oh, how cutee" Mihoshi this time
"Aww, he's so cute" Sasami said as she took the object Ryoko
was holding.
"I know! We can call him Ten-Ohki" Mihoshi exclaimed, bouncing
up and down.
"Miya" wow Tenchi finally speaks again at the very end too.
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ok I know I change writing styles at the end but who cares.. actually
I stink at writing and was getting bored at the end so I did it in a
hurry.
To be continued hopefully in Ten-Ohki part 2: Ten-Ohki meets Ryo-Ohki
Comments, suggestions, ideas, welcome flames will be used to cook
barbecue
E-mail me a mag_leith@hotmail.com
Thanks to
Tenchiken@juno.com
aka Marty Van Assche
Writer of decent fanfics/ Lost Knight of Jurai/ Proud member of the Ryoko
Forever Fan Club
"But that's just my opinion. I could be wrong."
-Dennis Miller
For helping me proof it some
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