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----- Original Message -----
From: Alan Harnum <harnums@thekeep.org>
To: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Tuesday, June 22, 1999 22:42
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma][Fanfic] Waters Under Earth - Chapter 38

After far too long a wait, the much-delayed Chapter 38 of Waters
Under Earth.  This past month has seen me enormously busy at
school and with other projects, and for a long time I was blocked
on just how to go about writing this chapter.

Glad to see you back on this.  The stuff you sent to the list in the
meantime was interesting, but I've really been looking forward to seeing how
Nabiki makes out, redemption or damnation.

Naturally it couldn't be that simple.  You are weaving quite a tapestry.

     "Just stand up.  Take his hand, make sure he stands up {to : too}.
Now, put your hand in mine... that's right.  Now close your
eyes... we're going to step off.  And don't think about where
we're going."

     Of their own accord, her thoughts turned to the others.
Ryoga was with Bai, of course, and Ranma was wherever he had gone
to; whatever she might wish, she could not entirely {decry : dismiss} the
thought that he had some connection to the monstrous form that
had risen in the sky.

     On the dragon's head, the raven spread his wings, and spoke
a true name, launching himself into flight even as he did.
Baazel's attack scorched him into a drifting cloud of black
feathers even as the {left : last} syllable left his beak, but it was too
late.

     She barely brought the Kinjakan up in time to parry, and
lashed back with the sword in her other hand.  The ringed staff
was light and strong, remarkably easy to wield.  Shouzin snarled
and slashed at her with his tail, and she turned sideways in the
air to avoid the blow.  A storm of arrows from the Joketsuzoku
ripped through the combat, killing a single Souleater and a
half-dozen of the... things; she could not think of them as human
any longer.  Her troops began to {route : rout} the rest, but she and
Shouzin were on the fringes of the combat.  Still, it was too
crowded to use anything more than close attacks with her sword;
too much risk of hitting her own troops with the Kinjakan ring or
her wing attacks.