From: "Bee Xiong" <tiger@lanset.com>
To: ffml@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma1/2]Eyes of Tear
Date: Wed, 23 Jun 1999 16:16:39 -0700

Eyes of Tear

Interesting concept for a fanfic.  I'm not sure where you're going with it, 
but I'd like to find out.  Please finish this.  I do have a couple of 
suggestions to make it easier to read.

 Ever notice that Ranma eyes seem to be crying but he never does said
Nabiki. Huh? said Akane. Im talking about Ranma, his eyes always
like he about to cry, said Nabiki. Who care about that pervert and his
eyes? said Akane. Now what I do? said a voice.

Your quote characters (and possibly some others) are showing up as squares.  
Use standard ASCII characters only, so that all email services can correctly 
interpret them.

Please follow the rules of standard English grammer.  This includes having a 
seperate paragraph for each person speaking.  Also, you seem to have a 
problem with verb tenses.  I reccomend running your story through a grammer 
checker before posting.  Most wordprocessers have them.  Having someone else 
read it and look for errors before posting would also be a good idea.

--
Erik

"What's more dangerous than a mage out to rule the entire world?  Why, a 
mage at play, of course...."

        -Ed Greenwood, "Elminster at the Magefair"

http://www.cs.transy.edu/ejessup/homepage.html
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