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elegance there's a

sensitive young woman just waiting to be noticed by you. Oh my love, will

you

ever notice my work?  Are my loves labor's lost?

Hmm. Just out of curiousity, is this a play off of Ryan Anderson's fic by
that name?

Wouldn't mind him continuing that someday, for that matter.

Oh, the roller coaster of my life is just too much at times.  All the
happiness, all the pain.  Oh, I just wish that there was no need for

sadness

and joy in life,

Well, there should always be at least one line about 'No need...' in a
Tenchi fic. ^_^

then maybe I could get on with mine and forget about this
silly dream of mine...

No.  I didn't mean that.

I like that sudden turnabout in her thoughts. Nice touch.

I like my life.  I mean, it my

may

not be the best existence for a princess,

 Why can't our lives be simple?  Why...?

T'would be a boring series then, yes?

Why can't this stain seem to come out?  Really, I must remember to have a
talk with Sasami about being more careful with her hot cocoa.

Another nice bit.

Oh, it's no use.  In the end he won't notice what I've done here.  He'll

just

go about his day flirting with that monster woman, not caring that I

spent

all morning on my hands and knees scrubbing this ridiculous floor,

submitting

myself to this darkest hell called housework

Heh. Actually sounds a bit like Sareyo (sp?) there.

Oh bother.  It was a nice try, Aeka.  Now to see if there's a branch on
Funaho that's strong enough to hang myself from.

Hehehehehe.

Wait.  He's looking at the floor now... does he notice?  Will he?  Oh

please,

my lord.  Please notice what this innocent child has put herself through

to

get your attention.

She really thinks of herself as an 'innocent child'?

 Please!

"Aeka.  Did you scrub the floors?"

YES!  YES YES YES!  HE NOTICED!  Sore

score

one for the house of Jurai!

Yay! ^_^

"Why yes Tenchi.  They were looking so dirty, so I thought..."

He's smiling at me!  Oh, this is too much!  I'd better call on every

reserve

of royal training so I don't break my composure and start jumping up and
down.  Wait, what's he..?  He's bowing?

"Thank you, oh beautiful princess of Jurai.

Better hope Ryoko doesn't catch wind of that 'beautiful' remark. Seems a
bit forward of Tenchi as well.

I really appreciate it.  These

floors were getting really dirty, and for you to take Ryoko's job so
selflessly, I..."

"Excuse me Lord Tenchi, but what do you mean, 'take Ryoko's job?'"

"Well, it's her day to scrub the floors, not yours.  You had the

laundry."

He's leaving now.  I didn't have to do this.  This was Ryoko's job today.

I

just took double duty for that monster woman.  Oh look, here comes Ryoko

with

a cleaning pail.

***

As Tenchi made his way back to the fields, he swore he could hear a

scream,

followed by a rather loud explosion.  Not even bothering to question it,

he

simply went about his daily chores.

Heh. Nice way to finish it.

All in all, an excellent short read. Not too much out there that just
focuses on Ayeka. Good work.

D.B. Sommer