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From: Damien <damien_searight@email.msn.com>
To: FanFic Mailing List <ffml@fanfic.com>
Date: 20 June 1999 07:20
Subject: [FFML][draft][slayers] Queen of Souls

Funny (ayup, quite amusing), In Character (based on my scant
knowledge of the series), entertaining (always something
interesting happening), good dialogue (Amelia's dramatic
speech *smirk* among other things) and compelling story (I have
to know what happens next with the Periwi--uh, Kara ^_^; and
the Slayers gang). Oh yeah, and I like it as well. :)

Just one spelling suggestion:

"My fianc�. Together we will reunite the scattered clans, bring prosperity
back to elfin society and help our people reenter the history of man."

"re-enter" looks better then "reenter" but that's just IMHO.

And for consistency:

'Besides,' Lina thought quietly to herself. 'If it's anything like the fights
big sis' and me used to have...." She couldn't finish the thought and shivered
involuntarily.

me used to have....' She

~Kayu-chan.

~~~
"Happiness isn't happiness without a violin-playing goat."
~Notting Hill