In a message dated 6/20/99 2:11:27 PM Pacific Daylight Time, Kenjiko2@aol.com
writes:
Well, this is a somewhat revised, spellchecked, and reformatted version of
something that I started long agon and I think I'm going to take up again
(But Girl Days isn't being put on hold, don't worry!).
It is also in response to the improbable Xover challenge... I don't
know that you can GET any more improbable than this. =^_-=
ARRRGH!!! I should have realized that your the one who created this back
when I first saw it over on Sailor Moon Romance! But, I hadn't paid any
attention to the author info and I didn't remember who to wite to about it.
Anyway... So far, so good, on keeping up a certain frantic and furious pace
that something that crosses with Samuri Pizza Cats should have. The commedy
level is quite good.
The spelling and grammer isnt. Especially in the first two parts. There
were, for me, to many to try and point them all out to you (but I still might
later in a private CC) but I'm sure others will. I just dont feel that THAT
particular sort of commentary is approprate to the ML in general. You did
mention that you went over it once before, you should go over it again
looking for them. Their pretty obvious.
All that said, I do like this, and it was one that I have been keeping an eye
out for future chapters on my weekly fic...err "Research" expeditions. I for
one would like to see more of it. And I cant wait to see what sort of
weapons "Tuxedo Artemis" has in his arsenal... though for some reason I keep
thinking of a certain very FAT cat in an episode called "Kitty Chaos" in the
DIC version....
One other thing I would advise is to this point there are almost too many
similarities between this and the early episodes of SM. You might want to
start diverging more from it, otherwise the novelty will soon wear off.
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