Subject: [FFML] [SM/Ranma] Alterations and Revisions
From: Beky Sarver
Date: 6/19/1999, 9:46 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

Thank you all for your helpful comments. I take no offense, believe me. I 
need it, because the folks around here give me nothing more than a "The down 
key is broken! Fix it!"

To explain, Alterations and Revisions was originally written to fit into my 
broad web of stories that involve Universal Salidihm Xanth. Future chapters 
in the old version include the Wordsmiths and the Warriors of the Blade, but 
I think I'm going to phase those two groups out. Unfortunately, the old 
version is a bit too esoteric for the general audience. The end was designed 
to be a universal shift that would lead into "In The Interim", but I decided 
that it was too self insertion-y to survive as is.



Anyway, here are some of my replies:


"You didn't really get into what happend to the characters as the memories 
resurfaced, except with that bit with Shampoo."

Beky: The characters are still in shock, so they are rapidly switching 
between the two sets of memories. The scenes where they integrate are 
written already, actually. They each come into it at a different pace.


As to the pace of the story, I admit it goes pretty fast. That's probably 
cuz I'm adapting it from the highly esoteric 250 KB version I wrote in the 
course of a week. I have stories that go much slower.



"I also want to see the meeting of Nabiki and Pluto.  Are they sisters, or 
is Pluto her daughter?"

Setsuna is her daughter. Time/dimension talent alternates generations. Their 
meeting is written, but not adjusted for general audiences yet.

As for the comment about pre-readers.... any volunteers?




Like I said, I value the comments. I hope to have the second chapter up in 
the next few days.

                           Beky Sarver

    In the beginning, the Universe was created. This made a lot of people 
angry and has been widely regarded as a bad move.  -  Hitchhiker's Guide to 
the Galaxy

     Living on Earth may be expensive, but it does include a free annual 
trip around the Sun. - Anonymous


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