Not much to offer in the way of specific comments on this one, thought it
was absolutely hilarious. I will say one thing, though...

        Yuka picked up a baseball bat and swung it. It stopped abruptly
in midair with a ringing thud. A voice from nowhere cried out,
"YEEEEEOWTCH!"

ringing? if it rings, you may wanna mention 'aluminum'. . .unless wood
rings now. . .

Nah, it's wood... will change the description. One of the biggest
difficulties I had in writing this chapter was the sound effects. I
mean, what does a person getting hit on the head with a baseball bat
sound like? For obvious reasons, I didn't want to experiment and find
out. ^_^

This is easy enough to do. Get a decent-sized rump roast, wrap it in a few
layers of wax paper, and take a whack at it. The sound should be somewhat
similar.

[realizes a lot of FFMLers are staring at him oddly] What? o.o;;

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