Subject: Re: [FFML][FIC][R.5]Crimson Dawn Chapter two 2
From: kleppe@execpc.com (Gary Kleppe)
Date: 5/31/1999, 10:40 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com

Ranma's predicament is interesting to watch here; he's forced into doing
something that's repugnant to him, but there doesn't seem to be any way
out for him. I wonder who or what else will enter the picture to
complicate things.

One complaint, though.... Ranma goes along with the idea of killing
whatsisname way too easily. I think you need to show a LOT more of his
inner conflicts, his reluctance to do the deed, fears about what might
happen, and so forth.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html