Ow, ow, ow. My sides are still aching from laughing out loud. And
with my brain still fogged by sleep deprivation too. You're an evil
man, Mr. Haynie, and I mean that in a nice way. :)
Since that's a once-in-a-blue-moon kinda thing for me, much kudos
to you for enabling my laughing fit. Makes me wish I could write
humour as well as you.
Just a few of technical comments below, but the rest is genius, pure
genius. And the analogies - oh, what I'd give to be able to ...
Ahem, let me stop drooling now.
Keep writing, if you please.

Kenjiko2@aol.com wrote:

[snip]

       "Anyhow, Saotome, it doesn't seem to have hurt the lasses skills

'lasses'? - has Soun turned Scottish, a la O'Tendo, in this instance? Just
kidding, but it does sound a little funny to the ears - oh, and it should be
lass' or lass's I think.

  [snip]

        "Well... OK.  One trick is to wear a non-standard blouse.  Not
TOO much or you get yelled at, but just enough.  Also, you don't have
to wear the same socks-- most girls get them with trim from popular
manga or anime or cute animals or flowers or something like that...
though I don't think they have Dragonball Z socks, because most girls
aren't into that.  And bookbag tags are good, and a lot of girls go
for unusual hairstyles.  Especially at our school because it bugs the
Principal so much.  Fun ribbons in your hair, bracelets, sometimes
dying your hair a little bit-- I don't but some of my friends do--
little things."

'dyeing', I think.

[snip]

        Akane stared.  That was-- lefthanded, yes, but still-- a
complement.  A serious one.  Ranma MUST be unstable.

'backhanded' rather? and that should be 'compliment'

[snip]

        Akane's next reaction was classic 'girl'.  Ranma's was more her
present unstable emotional state-- but there was, possibly, a bit of
girl there also.  Or maybe a boy who was learning that showing his
feelings wasn't needfully a bad thing.

'necessarily' rather than 'needfully'

[snip].

        "DIVINE RETRIBUTION!!!"

Oh, Ranma as Lum - the mind boggles and explodes with laughter

 [snip]

        Ranma peered at the photo, and giggled like the schoolgirl she
was dressed as.  "Hai!  That's Ranma-chan when Ranma-chan is
Ranma-kun!  But she's not a boy right now, gomen.  You'll have to
wait a month for that."

This is priceless! :)

[snip]

        "Kuno doesn't count.  Besides, he gets hit by his own all the
time," Akane put in.

'by his own' what? The sentence doesn't make sense as it is.

[snip]

I noticed a few comma faults. They're no biggie though.
All C&C are my opinions and suggestions only. Please ignore
anything that you don't agree with.

Again, keep writing.
Ja ne.

Phil the Magic Mirror.