This is a small fic I am working on (well duh!) and I
thought I would post it.  I need alot of comments and this
fic needs alot of work so any help is appreciated.  Thankyo.

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Then, a very beautiful woman with long red hair and wearing
red armor appeared on his black and white screen. "Hello,
Brandon." She said in a digitized voice. "Remember me?"

Brandon's eyes widened in fear yet he couldn�t let go of the
game boy. "D-Din?!" he asked incredulously. "No way."

Where does he know her from?

PLEASE let me know what you people think.  I'm begging you.
Thanks.

It doesn't seem half bad. Keep it up.

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           rjbailey@my-dejanews.com
           ab871@seorf.ohiou.edu

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