Liath Shadow wrote:

Who's confused, raise your hands?

I'm not (and that's a first =^_^= :)

This part was a little on the shoddy side, I know.  please C&C to your
hearts content. (although flames I prefer to be sent privately, instead of
to the list)

I seemed to have missed part one, but that's ok. I'm guessing at it, and it seems
ok.

As for the story itself, you have some nice elements of mystery and darkness,
which is good, but all in all, it is not very descriptive and lacks body. Just
some friendly C&C. Not a flame. ^_^

-Ryoga Masaki
"Leave it to that KICK-ass Ryoga..." -Ukyo Kuonji (Well, kinda...)
http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/4189