On Sat, 22 May 1999, Kayu-chan wrote:

    The munchings and crunchings of oatmeal cookies followed 

It's nice to see that there are more cookies, just like last time. 
Keep them coming!

...I got a bad feeling about this...  ^_^

    The young muse grinned.  "Okay then, let's go shopping."

I have a feeling it's not going to be a boring shopping. Heh, 
I love to Kenji suffer--I mean, develop and grow as a character.

Development is a good thing.  Every character will get a chance to...
uh... develop.

    Caravan nodded, her forced smile laced with a snarl.  "Yep, 
that's damn straight.  Ain't never seen Tokyo like this 'fore."

*laughs* Yeah, I can just picture Caravan acting like that, 
wish I could hear it, though.   

As Jonas said, think Megumi Hayashibara.

    Feeling his pulse quicken again, he shook the thoughts from 
his mind.  "You've gotta go?"  He asked more indignantly than he 
had intended.

~"You've gotta go?" he asked more...

Is it okay with a question mark to do that?  I always felt squimish about
it, personally...

    "Hello, Caravan, Kenji."  The first thing Kenji noticed was 
Tanako's voice.  She sounded flat, dischordant.  He immediately 

~"discordant"

What amazes me is that my spell-checker said it was fine, but, a look in a
dictionary said no.  Weird.

looked up, and saw her reaching next to her just inside the door 
frame.  She handed the uniform to Caravan  and smiled blandly.  "I 
hope it fits."

So, I wonder what's wrong with her? Interesting...

The answer will (ahem...)

SSHHOOCCKK AANNDD AAMMAAZZEE YYOOUU!!

    "I had a couple.  Argent and Ange and I used to pretend we 
were wish-givers.  You know, where you pretend to appear magically 
and grant some imaginary kid a wish?  I remember we pretended 
there was this boy who dialed a wrong number and Ange--"

"Yeah, he was this boy at college who wished that someone
like Ange could stay with him for..."

(whistles innocently)
...Hey, I gotta cover all the bases.  ^_^

And, in conclusion, another enjoyable episode with a 
few developments in the plot looks like they'll make Kenji's 
life more... interesting. ;) 

Thanks.  And don't worry.  I sent away for an over-arcing plot, and the
guy at Acme said he could retro-fit it to my pre-existing details!

...and they seemed extemporaneous at the time.

Anyway, thanks for the comments!  I'll correct the mistakes and work on
making Episode 4 better!

--Matt


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