Jamie and Bridget Wilde wrote:

Just wanted to write and say that I've enjoyed "Islands Underwater" thus
far. If anything needs work, it's your Kuno-speak. Some of his lines are
very awkward, and lack an easy flow to them. Try saying his lines aloud,
and you'll see what I mean.

Jamie
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Thank you very much for your kind comments! This is still very much a
first-time work for me in terms of fan-fiction.

If possible however, could you please tell which lines in particular do not
flow as well as they should? I've tried to make his lines sound as credible
as possible for him as a character [believe it or not I actually grew up
around an very old "classically educated" Englishman who used to talk this
way!]. Other people have mailed me saying they thought my portrayal of
language was appropriate [let's not get into the debate of interpreting
Japanese characters motives and cultural ideals in English] especially in
certain situations but I'm always looking to improve my work. Originally I
was going to write all his lines in iambic pentameter! {Thank God I didn't!}
If you have the time to point certain passages out please do, I regard
everything I put out as a "draft." If not however, thank you anyway for your
kind comments. I'm very glad you actually enjoyed something that I scribbled
out.

    P.S. I really liked your Ranma goes to War series and the Rulers of the
Raging main series. The historical backdrop of the latter was especially
intriguing.

-Prince Frog