<shakes head>  Oh boy, you've gone and done it again. ;)

Geez... If I could pump out stuff this good, this fast, I'd be DONE with all
of my projects by now... ;)



<snip>

	Ranchan.  If he could live with his bizzarre curse, then she
could live with her own problems.

	bizarre


<snip>

	She sighed, letting herself slip into her familiar daydream of
herself and Ranchan in a lovely home, with a beautiful restaurant,
and many happy children.  One which, in defiance of all reality, was
strangely unbothered by dragons, spirits, small aged perverts,
homicidal amazons, and the occaisional martial artist from apparently
nowhere that was after Ranma Saotome.

	occasional


<snip>

	Ranma WAS being unusually nice-- not insulting at all.  Not a
good sign, thought Ukyo.

	Then again, neither was Ranma's apparent impression of 
Rebecca of
Sunnybrook Farm.

	<snort>  Ain't THAT the truth.


<snip>

	"I... see.  Well, um... that dress looks good on you?"

	"Really?  Thanks.  I wasn't sure the color was right."

	"And... Um... I like what you've done with your hair?"

	<blink blink>  Y'know, for some reason this stretch is making me
think of a Valley-girl Ukyo.  Danger, Will Robinson!  Danger!



<snip>

	Now, considering that Tsubasa was at the moment wearing 
an outfit
that would cause Azuza to choke and collapse in a diabetic fit (That
is, Uber-kawaii), while Ranma was simply wearing attractive and
flattering clothing that worked well on her figure, this was not
surprising.  Ranma looked like an attractive girl in a sundress while
Tsubasa looked like a sort of demented female ice-cream cone with
extra sprinkles.  But trying to tell Tsubasa that would be somewhat

	BWA-HA-HA-hA-HAAAA!  That is SO wrong... and yet, it fits.  

pointless.  Right now Tsubasa was thinking with his heart, not his
brain.  Standard mode for the average Ranma antagonist, really.

	"I will never forgive you, Ranma," the crossdresser snarled.

	Of course there was one small problem with his burning vows of
vengeance... namely that he stood as much chance against Ranma in a
one-to-one fight as a glass of beer stands against a thirsty
steelworker at five o'clock.  None, nil, nix.  

	I think these whatchamacallits - analogies? - are some of the
funniest things in this fic so far (all chapters, not just this one).  Good
work on them!



<snip>

	Ranma, in a gesture of kindliness and helpfullness, plucked the
pinned-cushion off Tsubasa's nose.  Tsubasa screamed.  Ranma had
used, perhaps, a WEE bit too much force in throwing the needles.

	Handing the transvestite a tissue, Ranma called to Kasumi to
please bring the first aid kit?  The eldest Tendo daughter entered,

	Aside from the fact that this whole passage is HILARIOUS... ;)

	I don't think you need a question mark.  If Ranma was actually
saying it, then sure, but since you're paraphrasing I don't think it's
necessary.



<snip>

	She was in her usual yellow gi.  Ranma, who had become something
of a clothes horse since she now had more than on style of outfit and

	clotheshorse  (one word)

was expected to wear them, was bouncing around in a red athletics
halter and black knee-length areobic shorts.  Kind of a feminine
version of her usual chinese garb.  

	aerobic



<snip>

	Akane took that moment to return a little green, but smiling
happily.

	Needs a comma between 'return' and 'a little green'.  Otherwise, it
sounds like Akane's trying to hand somebody a little green... something. ;)

	"Ah, Akane.  It has come to my  attention that your training is
sorely lacking."

	"What?" Akane replied, glaring at her father.

	"Yes, and considering your lifestyle with Ranma, I can only
decide that from this day forth ranma will be your Sensei.  You will

	Ranma (proper name)


<snip>

	"There's... No male?  About this high, dark of hair, tied in a
pig-tail that mocks my goddess, dressed in the garments of heathern
China?"

	heathen


<snip>

	Genma was growfing over his bamboo-shoot okonomiyaki and
pretending to be a cute little panda.

	While he may at times be cute as a panda, he sure as hell ain't
little! ;)


<snip>

	####

	Short authors notes--

	Tsubasa makes only a short, as far as I can tell, appearance in
the manga, and not that much more in the Anime.   He's very popular
in fanfics, though.  So I took the liberty of suggesting that he's
not a constant, and might not be QUITE aware of all the interactions
in Nerima.  After all  he's focused on Ukyo so much, he might not
notice some other things.

	This one's for you, Ucchan. ^_^

	You're right, this piece was a bit more introspective, a bit more
serious (as if that term can apply here, really), and not _quite_ as silly.
But it was STILL DAMN FUNNY!

	Keep up the good work, please.  I love this stuff!

	Brian Payne
	sofaspud@ior.com
	brianp@nhspokane.com
	http://www.ior.com/~sofaspud