C&C's...

Akane stood bellow the uneven bars, spotting for her friend Yuki.  Today's
task on the uneven bar, was to switch between the bars.  Nothing fancy,

lose the comma between bar and was...

just switch back in forth between the bars.  Well, Akane had thought it

was

and instead of in...

simple.  Yuki missed again, and Akane caught her, breaking her fall.

lose the first comma...

Ranma was sparring with Akane in the Tendo Dojo.  Akane had lots of power,
but very little finesse behind it.  She tended to follow the forms a

little

too closely.  Ranma was trying teach her a little more variety.

"to" between trying and teach...

"We really should do something about her," Ranma said.
"What can we do?" Akane said, relaxing in the furo.
"Well, we can make impossible for her to pull this trick on us again,"

"it" between make and impossible...

About the fic itself...short, never thought about it much, just that Ranma
didn't sound like Ranma, heck, Even Ranma doesn't act this way toward
someone he knew earlier in life, like Ukyou....oh, well...keep up the
writing, and make them longer, or with a revealing storyline behind each
increment at least...

That's it...