Larry Fontenot <larryf@members-advantage.com> wrote:

I will gladly listen to any comments and criticism that is offered in the
spirit of helpfulness, either listed or private, and of course I encourage it!
After all, that's what we post this stuff for.

Okay... biggest problem I have with this is the lack of conflict.
Everything's going smoothly, and while that's nice for our heroes, it's
not as interesting to read about. Conflict doesn't necessarily have to
be physical -- it could be Genma's desire to see Ranma become a powerful
martial artist vs. his wanting to do what's best for the boy. But there
should be conflict of some type, because that's what keeps readers
wondering what's going to happen next.

Also, most of this chapter went by in a sort of quick summary mode. I
think it might be good to show at least a few of the scenes in detail.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html